The Sea

musings by the sea..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands..

Tinged freckles of regrets remain..

like the indigo stained waters..

whose depths you cannot fathom..

the scenario transcends..

waves change their formless forms..

life changes..

as i stand there..

an audience to the world's changing norms..

A seagull flies by..

My sole companion in the distant darkness..

Stay careful friend !

The sea doth not speak of forgiveness..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands,

as the night brings back memories of things lost..

tinged freckles of regrets remain..

Author's Note

just a rant by the sea..it may not be so good..reviews and suggestions are most welcome!

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

it is lovely, I really like what you have done here. It's very effective how you have repeated the lines in the first and final stanza. The flow is lust lovely over all. My one concern is in the second stanza, I don't believe 'pertain' is the right word here. maybe perceive?

[Siddhartha]

the waves they come crashing on the shore
Bring back memories of the days of yore
And whatever in life I have loved and lost
Come back to the shore...back to the shore
this is mighty wonderful poetry. Flows beautifully. And never, never feels like a rant.

[Linear]

Oh the waves crash
with that eternal splash
lost in the spume of white crests, are all our indigo dreams
so what remains is poetic lines written with each poets BLOOD

And I so enjoyed this poetic expression :O)

[Lily Mae]

The sea is alive as its own entity....you've captured that and the love for it here..Great write..xx

[Judy Ponceby]

lovely, melancholy, wistful...nicely done.

Lovely work as always Monee . Loved it !!

[M.Babu]

"Waves lap amidst the coarse sands..
Tinged freckles of regrets remain..
like the indigo stained waters..
whose depths you cannot pertain.."

Felt drawn into the web you spun here! You captured my attention extremely well and squeezed me for every ounce of attention you could come up with. The mark of true talent!

The flow was smooth and it was exciting to be strung along by your brilliant words. Great work here.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

truly inspirational