The Sea

musings by the sea..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands..

Tinged freckles of regrets remain..

like the indigo stained waters..

whose depths you cannot fathom..

the scenario transcends..

waves change their formless forms..

life changes..

as i stand there..

an audience to the world's changing norms..

A seagull flies by..

My sole companion in the distant darkness..

Stay careful friend !

The sea doth not speak of forgiveness..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands,

as the night brings back memories of things lost..

tinged freckles of regrets remain..

Author's Note

just a rant by the sea..it may not be so good..reviews and suggestions are most welcome!

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

it is lovely, I really like what you have done here. It's very effective how you have repeated the lines in the first and final stanza. The flow is lust lovely over all. My one concern is in the second stanza, I don't believe 'pertain' is the right word here. maybe perceive?

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love this little creation!

[C.N.Moore]

love!

[Searching 4 Serenity]

A creative metaphor towards the feelings and memories of life.

[Ashley Myers]

freckles of regret, indigo stained waters, i love those lines, i love how you use those beautiful adjectives in your writing. im a fan of adjectives lol

[Emily B]

oh, forgiveness and regret, two of my favorite themes for poetry :)

[Brokensoul]

Very beautiful use of imagery... amazing !!

[Poetic Beauty]

The imagery is clearly depicted in this poem. the flow isn't perfect but the scene you paint is a bit sad and a little calming.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is an amazing poem.. very creative and lovely usage of imagery. I love the repeating of the first two lines in the last stanza.. ties the entire poem together. Very well done, Arabdha. I will be favoriting this one.

[Rossen]

Smooth imagery and textures, bang up job!!

[laughinglullaby]

beautiful i love the line "like the indigo stained waters..
whose depths you cannot fathom.." very well written keep it up