The Sea

musings by the sea..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands..

Tinged freckles of regrets remain..

like the indigo stained waters..

whose depths you cannot fathom..

the scenario transcends..

waves change their formless forms..

life changes..

as i stand there..

an audience to the world's changing norms..

A seagull flies by..

My sole companion in the distant darkness..

Stay careful friend !

The sea doth not speak of forgiveness..

Waves lap amidst the coarse sands,

as the night brings back memories of things lost..

tinged freckles of regrets remain..

Author's Note

just a rant by the sea..it may not be so good..reviews and suggestions are most welcome!

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

it is lovely, I really like what you have done here. It's very effective how you have repeated the lines in the first and final stanza. The flow is lust lovely over all. My one concern is in the second stanza, I don't believe 'pertain' is the right word here. maybe perceive?

[Evita]

I like the subject and the beautiful imagery you have created: "freckles of regrets", "indigo stained waters", and I like that while talking about the sea you bring in pieces of other things: "regrets", an unforgiving and mysterious sea, the changing world mirrored by the constantly moving sea.

However, as much as I do like this poem, I am afraid I don't really get it exactly...and I read it a couple of times, there are quite a few ideas thrown in and it does not seem cohesive to me...perhaps you could shed some light on your overall idea?

[Pebbles]

it may not be good ... have a little belief in self this is beautifully written , nothing better than a rant at the sea x

[cartera]

I might have known that Emma got here before me: if she likes you: you're a poet.
Well done. Lovely poem. I think you have a thing for the sea.
ATB
Alex.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Poetry is art and here you’ve done just that.
Excellent write.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

loved this

good metaphor :)

[Sel Whiteley]

Firstly, "tinged freckles of regrets", I don't have enough superlatives to say how I feel about that line...just, "wow".
You really capture the seascape brilliantly. Waves are a classic metaphor for change and you've employed that expertly.

[emmajoy]

The sea represents so much sadness here, you use colours and movements as if they're artists creating a storm .. your words flow but painfully.

Beautiful though painful phrases: 'waves change their formless forms.. ~~ life changes.. ~~ as i stand there.. ~~ an audience to the world's changing norms.. '

[Derek S.Keck]

An eligant rant by the sea! This is a really lovely piece. Your poems have a very claming effect, yet, they speak deeply on moments and life experience.

[Ruth]

Excellent love! The sea is a brilliant medium for many pieces of work, I adire this, clever work sweetheart, delicate and emotive xx