Untitled..

The blankness of the canvas haunts me..

oddly reminds me of my life somehow..

yesterday it bore a much adored picture of perfection..

now the colors ruefully succumb to nothingness…

 

red..the color of love..

was painted all over..

now the shades of silence have shadowed em..

 

the passion of lavender laced its outline..

but now its all gone..

 

black’s elegance has faded to grey..

yellow’s vibrance has mellowed away..

and every other shade has managed to merge into..

the all encompassing hues of the void..

and lost its very existence..

 

the blankness of the canvas haunts me..

oddly reminds me of my life somehow..

 2nd place 

Feb 5, 2011

• The Amazing 3 day contest
• Untitled..

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Keoni]

huh? may i ask you for a cup in wich you may pour some soul? you must purge....i see it but you may need some coaxing.....does it hurt? can i feel the pain? well i want to, would you now for the sake of the readers and for the heart in wich you derive these words from open up and let it flow......im not being critical, i just am trying to id you......you....

[cartera]

Bit perturbed by this poem, or rather the fact that it has been written by one so young. Smashing metaphor well maintained, symbology - the lot. But it is the overall sad tone that affects the reader.
Well written, well done.
ATB
Alex.

[LadyNaida]

This is very deep. I agree with Keoni, you have so much to pour out, let it flow.

[Praiser]

excellent

[Searching 4 Serenity]

I guess it is similar to my "Haunting Thoughts" It's a little bit offsetting how the two have a very striking writing style.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The colours of life sometimes fade, excellent poem.

[J.e.s.s.i.c.a]

This is amazing. I absolutely love it. =)

[Emily B]

oh, wow

it is amazing

[~~Mere~d~i~t--h~~]

This is Brilliant. I loved the dark sadness of it, and also the vulnerability... Really, really great.

[abhas]

the last two lines are really haunting... the words used are beautiful...
"the passion of lavender laced its outline" ... great...