My punishment..

I wasn't supposed to but I did...

 I took the pledge of purity and then I sinned..

 I begged for forgiveness..

 but all he did was look down and punish..

 thus he inflicted on me what he saw as fit and spoke..

 "o guilty one..I give you life"

  ....and since then I live.

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Wow, such passion, and the brevity of this poem leaves so many questions, so many meanings that one as a reader may ponder and guess. Great writing, I shall read it over and over again until I get the true meanings, though I may as well never guess the right ones ^^
Great, simply great.

[Art Sun]

very creative...

[jslice]

that is depressing

[Akshat♥]

Sometimes in life you didn't get what you deserve...
so don't panic...life is tough..and interesting too...
nice poem..
thanks for sharing:)

[Robin]

such is the wheel of life and the realms of samsara ...

[Steve]

Wow...this is very intense. And very good too! I have read many poems today and this is the best one yet! ((I hate to say it...but a lot of stuff at this site is not great..)

Nice job!

Short but has a deep impact , the ending is just awesome and very appropriately expresses a feeling .... given life and thus mortality as a punishment so that we can feel the joys of earthly life and then again its miseries and love and hate and pleasure and pain of the bonds of life and living that bind a human being , endure sorrows when loved ones depart , definitely compared to when we are not born at all (thus no worries no pains etc.) this is a punishment .

[windtalker1252]

we got to make the most of waht we have...even life

reagrds
a fellow sinner who is living the punishment too