As I Walk On..

  Every sound fades to silence...

  life fading into voiceless stupor..

  all that remains are the memories of a day spent...

  and the silence that resonates within..

  the world seems at peace as the darkness takes over..

 But that can't put to rest the voice in my head

 that continues to ponder...

 where I was,am and would be..

 none but the one who made it all knows..

 my purpose i can't discern..

                         

 As I wander along the untreaded roads..

 the world changes with the ticking seconds..

 colors merging into the blankness of canvas..

 transience taking over the fixed present..

 and as I move on..

 things change as if they never were...

 colorful hues bringing into life a new creation..

 as I walk on.. 

Awards

 6th runner up 

Jan 28, 2011

• IN A JIFFEY! 20-MINUTE POEM CONTEST
• As I Walk On..

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

Absolutely love the power and the tenderness of this write Arabdha. The imagery was colorful and crystal clear. Change is not always easy, in fact may times it is excruciatingly difficult...but so very often, change is necessary for the completeness of our souls and our being. I must admit I read this a few times for no other reason then it felt and sounded good flowing from my mouth. I love when poetry makes me feel that way. Very heartfelt and honest. Beautifully written.
thanks for sharing Arabdha
allen

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I think that many of us has taken this walk, my friend...lost and lonely save the voice in our head. Sublime sentiment, though bittersweet and starkly poignant. I enjoyed the concept quite alot and the wording was also nicely done. You show emotional honesty here, and that is beautiful in and of itself.

My only suggestion would be on your punctuation...the elispses used at the end of every line throws off the flow a little, as they are meant to make the reader pause before moving on. Perhaps, you could use them in a different way:

Every sound fades to silence -
life fading into voiceless stupor,
all that remains are the memories of a day spent
and the silence that resonates within -
the world seems at peace as the darkness takes over...

Only a suggestion, of course; taking nothing away from your words, which were beautiful and honest.

[Arabdha]

Thank you so much Sarah.Glad you like the words.I shall pay heed to your suggestion ! You see I have always wrote for myself.Time to see how a reader sees it as well :-) Have an amazing day ahead !

[realmwriter]

Very cool. Even in the constant state of change and unbridled energy there is a sense of calm...! Well done...!

[Arabdha]

Thank you so much ...:-) Yes ,most often I watch in distant detachment mode ..helps :-P

[realmwriter]

Your very welcome

[FJ Davis]

A lovely poetic illustration of the cosmic truth that change is the constant.
Excellent, Arabdha!

[Arabdha]

And you need eyes of understanding and wisdom to see that ! So thank you for reading :-)

[emmajoy]

Seems your route alters from the start of the poem to the ending .. like an exploration. And the whole is like reading the echoes of something distinct yet, wonder at softeness and fragility, the need for peace and beauty in spite of all clutter of life. You see, you feel, and, its wonderful and so is this poem!!

[Arabdha]

Thank you so much Emma ..

[luciddreamer]

Beautifully written :)

[sudeshna]

just touched my heart....the end is perfect..

[*** Hey Jude***]

You have taken words and painted a heartfelt portrait. One thing that is a constant in this world is change. You show this show exquisitely with the vivid imagery imparted!
I enjoyed this throughout, especially the ending stanza, which shows hope for new beginnings! ~ :-)

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Beautifully written! I see the end of the day with night closing in, but you mind won't turn off, soon you are wandering into a world you have created. Thank you, Arabdha.

[Kenneth The Poet]

For a jiffey piece, this speaks volumes.