A Final Farewell..

She sprang back..
jolted by the strange unfamiliarity..
he looked on..
with indifference in the eyes
wherein hers sought the reason of her existence..

A silent tear trickled by..
as her furrowed brows demanded an explanation..
He looked on..
nonchalance scripted on his countenance..

She tried to search for what she had lost..
..an understanding for the hole in her heart..
that was somehow numbed by the shock and confusion..

He mustered the courage to hold still..
cause beneath the rigid unfamiliarity..
lived the soul she had known so well..
that had once loved and ached for her..
it killed him on the inside..
But he held still..
knowing that once it was over..
he wouldn't feel a thing..
and she would be gone forever..

to a path that gave her the happiness she deserved..
that he couldn't..
if only he had known better..!

She stood..
too dazed to comprehend what was happening..
as her heart slowly accepted her fate..
she looked once more
at the familiar face she had cared for..
and then she was gone..

And he stood..all alone..
not feeling a thing..
having lost everything..

 7th place 

Feb 5, 2011

• The Amazing 3 day contest
• A Final Farewell..

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Siddhartha]

I agree with Kyrie and OT regarding the many hues that this poem could have...But underying the work is the ache of heartbreak and the sorrow that comes with being alone...A poem that can connect with everyone in an unique and relevant way...Amazing work...

[OT]

lots of potential interpretations to this one!! it will play on people differently which all great poetry should do in my opinion - such powerful emotions being pushed through the ink or type here!! brilliant - nice!!

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

The one thing I hate about your poems is they are so wonderful at times it leaves you utterly speechless, this is one of those times

[reminder]

Such a dichotomy of emotions through the same situation. Wonderful word choice. Well done!

[Ladysue]

the last two stanza's are particularly good...I could feel that final goodbye...good work...

[Rossen]

wonderful sublime,beautiful.

[kyrie]

It amazes me how many interpretations your works can have. This could be a sorrowful break up an any account, the death of a wife after a long and beautiful marriage, or another heartfelt moment. To write something that serves many purposes is an incredible talent. Well done!

[M.Babu]

Ever read something and felt that it was meant for you? Well this hits home with me, i'm familiar with the whole scenario and i couldn't explain it at that time but this poem helps a heck of a lot more! Great write:)

[windtalker1252]

The guy has defiantly messed up a lot
He knows not what is giving or has given up on
An amazing poem

Awesome ... just awesome , after a long time I read a prose poem with such beauty .
However , I want to ask that in the poem it seems that the boy is breaking up to give her the happiness that he could not and that is why he is putting up a hard face , but then why will he/is he not feel/feeling anything when she is gone ? , unless of course his mind will be too shocked to register the tremors .
Great poem .

[Sydney Evans]

This makes me want to cry.. It really caught my emotions.