Oh , my Romanticism . Haven't seen this for a while. In fact is not very common around here (The cafe). The use of intense emotion as an authentic source of aesthetic experience, placing new emphasis on such emotions as apprehension, horror and terror, and awe. In this writing we find all of them. In fact this is probably the "darkest " writing I have ever read from you. I can only assume the reasons are clearly described in the writing so there is no need to put them on show. I really relate to the gesture of the writing. You standing at the top of the castle, bruised and battered emotionally , a storm coming, winds , grey skies falling upon you , your black cloak and the image of the sun at the distance in its reflection that person that will still be there for you until the bitter end.
Nothing else would matter.
Thankyou
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you are always so insightful, it is scary sometimes Rene.. you find a way to see into not only the e.. read moreyou are always so insightful, it is scary sometimes Rene.. you find a way to see into not only the emotion, the meaning, but the imagery and layers.. thank you for this awesome review.. and I agree with you wholeheartedly.. nothing else matters:)
The Metallica gif leads me to believe they may have had a hand in some of the inspiration behind this piece, and I dare say, there is no better song to gather inspiration from.
I thoroughly enjoyed the piece, and from the deepest depth of my soul, I remember how it felt to be all encompassed by another. It's been so long, sometimes it is wiped from memory entirely.
Thank you for reminding me of that beauty.
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This is one of my "go to" songs when feeling down.. It helped me when writing this piece as it was p.. read moreThis is one of my "go to" songs when feeling down.. It helped me when writing this piece as it was playing in my heart.. I agree, it is such a lovely song to take "inspiration" from... I am glad I was able to touch you. As a writer, there is no better compliment... Thank you:)
Beautiful poem! Such clever use of rhyme and alliteration, with a kind of jazzy, romantic rhythm to it. You are truly an artist. Wonderful
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Hey again!.. Wow.. I am always taken aback when such talented friends enjoy my work. thank you so mu.. read moreHey again!.. Wow.. I am always taken aback when such talented friends enjoy my work. thank you so much. I am so glad that you enjoyed this one.. :)
I can't even begin to say how romantic and heartfelt this is. One of your best. I cant say this is the best poem because with every new poem you write, it becomes my new favorite and your new best. Wow.
Hey stranger!.. Awwww, you are so sweet, thank you.. You know I am such a fan of your work, so that .. read moreHey stranger!.. Awwww, you are so sweet, thank you.. You know I am such a fan of your work, so that means a lot my friend.. I am tickled you enjoyed this one.. It is so nice to see you:)
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Life's taking a toll on me, dear. Hardly find time to do what I love. :(
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I am sorry to hear that my friend.. sending ((hugs)) and well wishes your way.. My inbox is always o.. read moreI am sorry to hear that my friend.. sending ((hugs)) and well wishes your way.. My inbox is always open to friends:)
I, too, haven't had time to write lately and I miss it terribly!..
April I have gone through many of ur poems... As usual I enjoy reading your work...A rush of emotions penned, great work. Thanks fr sharing.
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well hello, nice to meet ya!. I am glad you enjoyed this and others. Thank you, I appreciate it. I w.. read morewell hello, nice to meet ya!. I am glad you enjoyed this and others. Thank you, I appreciate it. I would love to return the favor. Is there a particular piece you would like me to look at?
Honestly, this one struck a bit close to home; and I had to think about it for a while, deciding to reread it across several moods and mindsets to try and gauge its meaning--worried I was 'assuming' something. I think we all have very different lives, the things we endure and experience, and as a result, the ways we feel purpose and hope, love and desire, pain and sorrow, are all so different--as are the ways we express it... even when you feel a connection to someone, you struggle to find the balance between genuinely expressing something, and having them be able to feel it. (ex. my mother's mother used to leave passive aggressive notes for her all the time growing up; and so no matter how true it may be, anything written for her is going to make her doubt the intentions.) Sometimes it is easy to feel disconnected from others because of this, because your life feels so different, and the path you walk feels as though it will never intersect with another. And then one day you come to a crossroads, the first time a path has crossed yours (sorry, you know my love for allegory and metaphor). Because of the long path you have traveled, you particularly appreciate and value what merging paths can mean, and it can honestly leave you terrified. Terrified of walking the same path with another, despite how tired of walking alone you have become... Afraid of screwing something up, could you really go back? After walking with another, wouldn't walking alone be even more lonely? Afraid that you will choose the wrong path. So terrified that you feel petrified to the spot, and could you ever move from the crossroads? Even if someone was to pass by right in front of you, could you really take the same path and risk forgoing the 'right person' on this path? I have a tendency to stop frequently in life, to think and ponder before I make a decision, or say certain things. (when I was young I would speak before I thought; and while part of this still remains in me, for the most part I am much more reserved now) The image of this crossroad, I can imagine myself standing there, trying to decide what to do... torn between rational analysis and the emotional indecisiveness that struggles against it... it isn't something wanton that should be decided hastily. There are so many directions, do you continue forward with the hope that they took a turn? Do you turn believing they went straight? Do you walk fast so you can catch up? Or do you wait, perhaps just walk slowly, because they might have yet reached where you are? Such a difficult decision, when you can appreciate just how important it is. In the end, I think it is best to just try and take a path, and to simply trust and hope that your companion will take the same route. I am not one to believe in destiny and what have you... but perhaps just believing that after passing the crossroad, you will find them on your path.... just that hope makes you less lonely. And if you do come across them, perhaps it shows something special that you each didn't just meet at a crossroads, but that you both...uncertain of the outcome or the other, choose the same path and managed to cross again--this time on the same path, and not just intersecting paths. I guess we have little else we can do but to keep walking, trusting that the right person can be there, and when we feel discouraged or lost on our path, we have to remember what matters most to us. At least this is what I do, wondering if I am doing things right, confused about how I feel, or what I am doing... but just stopping for a moment, and putting it into perspective... nothing else matters, no one else can make you feel like this, and no one else can replace it. When I realize this, I can only conclude that I don't want anything less... so all the uncertainty means nothing anymore, because whatever difficulty is worth it, when you cannot settle for less. You just need trust and faith that there will be something, and realize that you have no other path than to walk yours as confidently as you can. I know you have been having a hard time April, and I doubt this is precisely what you had in mind when you started writing this... more a piece of trying to quell your uncertainty and to put the difficulties in life into perspective. But regardless of how you intended it at first, I walk away each time with the feelings I have described above. Apologies for the late review, and for being so long-winded... but it is difficult for me to explain. From a technical standpoint, as an emotional piece I don't think heavy revising is wise... only bit I would recommend trying to rework is the final line of the second stanza; it has felt off each time I have read this. You may also try a different word than 'shaking' before charades; it has thrown me off a couple times, so I think there is a better word choice out there.
Hey you... what a dang review!.. jeez very insightful, thoughtful, and wise.. thank you.. and will c.. read moreHey you... what a dang review!.. jeez very insightful, thoughtful, and wise.. thank you.. and will consider the advice... I actually liked that one.. but will ponder on something else.. you are such a dear, sweet, friend and I value your opinion, suggestions, time, effort, and support.. ((hugs))
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I am hardly experienced with this topic... just learning as I go along; I suppose for me it is more .. read moreI am hardly experienced with this topic... just learning as I go along; I suppose for me it is more a journey than a destination. In any case, I don't think I have enough to back my words up to be considered wise; perhaps that wisdom is something I pursue, but there is only so much you can learn at such an age. Still, glad that it came across as thoughtful and not just rambling (as I feared it would). I dunno, sometimes I feel uncertain of things, but not of what I want, just how to go forward... I think that makes a lot of difference, conviction and a willingness to set aside hesitation. Way I figure it, if it isn't something you can see yourself moving on without, or something you can replace... it is worth it to put up with the emotional turmoil, because there is no other route. Sort of like a recipe, sure... you can replace something like Mayonnaise with Avocado, or Brown Sugar with Molasses, Sake with Wine... but some ingredients have no replacement, and you are better off making a special trip to get them, or not cooking at all. So as long as you are committed to what you 'want', then there should be no debate about going through the effort to get what you need. (I know, terrible analogy) Go with what feels good to you; this is a personal piece, so don't change what you like. Good luck April...
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I get what you are saying, but agree... terrible analogy.. lol
and thanks.. I think I a.. read moreI get what you are saying, but agree... terrible analogy.. lol
and thanks.. I think I agree.. shall leave it as is..
Great poem. You've put so much feelings in this writing, whatever happens, you're stronger when you're in love, nothing else matters, you'r so right. Glad you shared this. Liked it. :)
Rudi
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Well, thank you so much. Nice to meet you!.. I am glad you enjoyed. and couldn't agree with you more.. read moreWell, thank you so much. Nice to meet you!.. I am glad you enjoyed. and couldn't agree with you more.
Another amazing piece April. I really feel this one. Its so wonderful to find that someone or something that lets you forget everything else. Someone who consumes your thoughts so much that all the little insignificant details fade away. Everyone needs to find this.
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When I sit down to write, I never know how it will end up.. With this one, I only knew that I had a .. read moreWhen I sit down to write, I never know how it will end up.. With this one, I only knew that I had a lot of confusing emotion begging for release.. Reflection is a powerful too... I am learning to just let my heart speak and actually listen.. Thank you so much my friend.. I am glad I could touch you with this one.
Truly amazingly beautiful and so very deep! This is the way it really IS! You have captured the essense of being one together....and nothing else matters!!!!!!!!!!!
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Hey again girl.. Thank you so much!.. nothing else does, you are absolutely correct..