“When we meet real tragedy in life, we can react
in two ways - either by losing hope and falling into self-destructive habits,
or by using the challenge to find our inner strength.”
Dalai Lama
Creepy clouds crowd my brain today
blackened sheep… insane… or led astray?
r e p l a y i n g… estranged thoughts cast away
rearranging… a brave… display.
Sittin’ here missin’… wishes… dead and gone
lonely feeling… won’t… leave… me… alone
walls made of thick… Mississippi… stone
r e e l i n g… this heavy heart roams.
Fingers lingering on which one to blame
considering inward….what should I say
A f r a i dof stray pain staking its claim
wandering… when resolve starts to sway.
Wondering…. just what…
I will find
with nothing left behind… but… time
troubled mind… resigned to define
L O S T… blurring lines you helped design.
My spirit… NO longer… your prey
appearance of thunder… kept at bay
h e a l i n ghope… now… has a home
showing… strength… I’d never known.
Deciding despite the
damage you have done
the fight of this journey has
just begun
s h i n i n gthe light… on the lies… you’ve told
cuz--with this southern soul… they broke… the… mold.
April, This is probably my favorite, so far, of your pieces that I reviewed. The wording itself is stunning, chock full of vibrant imagery; but perhaps the singular highlight of this is your PRESENTATION...using different font sizes, italics, ellipses and unorthodox spacing...really serves to place emphasis on the more cogent pieces of text. I don't normally give out ratings of 100 (except in rare instances), but you have earned one. Fantastic write, young lady! take care...dan
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9 Years Ago
oh my goodness, what a review!.. you have just made my day.. Thank you so much Dan, I appreciate it... read moreoh my goodness, what a review!.. you have just made my day.. Thank you so much Dan, I appreciate it..
Very well thought out, and beautifully laid out, a powerful piece April.
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thank you Noel, I admit, this one gave me trouble... love to play with my words but heart wanted to .. read morethank you Noel, I admit, this one gave me trouble... love to play with my words but heart wanted to be heard as well, so had to compromise... was frustrating for sure, so I am glad you enjoyed.. means a lot.. always a pleasure to see you.. how are you?
10 Years Ago
All good here, catching up on WC, and getting ready to go read an anthology of...wait for it... cowb.. read moreAll good here, catching up on WC, and getting ready to go read an anthology of...wait for it... cowboy poetry. A collection of works by over 50 cowboy poets, working cowboys, close to the land, and nature, I am looking forward to digging in to this book.
haha! I bet.. well sir have fun with cowboys!.. you will have to let me know all about it when done:.. read morehaha! I bet.. well sir have fun with cowboys!.. you will have to let me know all about it when done:)
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You may be seeing results of my explorations before I finish it, my "Hot Tea" tale made me think of .. read moreYou may be seeing results of my explorations before I finish it, my "Hot Tea" tale made me think of other memories on the farm that I want to write about, and share, and I just read a clever short one flipping the pages about a coyote, which brought back a vision of hearing them howl on a cold, clear, moonlit winter night.
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and you do so well with imagery, I cannot wait!... win-win... :)
Deep emotion gives way to an empowered end in this lyrical poem, April. I love the way these verses roll off the tongue... Great read!
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I admit this one gave me a little problem.. my mind wanted to play with the words, but heart wanted .. read moreI admit this one gave me a little problem.. my mind wanted to play with the words, but heart wanted to be heard, so this was a compromise... I am glad you enjoyed it.. it is always a pleasure, and an honor coming from someone who writes so well.. thank you girl :)
Probably a new beginning.. and that just should sound great..
Love the poem and the vid in the background..
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new beginning indeed.. sometimes that is all we can do is pick up the pieces, dust ourselves off, ta.. read morenew beginning indeed.. sometimes that is all we can do is pick up the pieces, dust ourselves off, take the lessons learned and try again.. thank you.. I am glad you enjoyed this one.. thank you.
in 1969 i bought fish and chips and took that wax paper wrapped greese bucket to fisherman's warf .. sat on a dock of the bay and ate them (fish and chips that is) then i went to golden gate park and chased rainbows .. the song really distracted me .. it is a favorite .. had to listen to the whole thing then read your poem ;)
you are so good at alliteration and rhyme .. this is no exception .. thoroughly enjoyed reading .. such heavy emotive lines .. one can not help but be pulled along .. closing verse full of hope and resolve .. i will take that with me into the day .. so thank you!
E.
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10 Years Ago
I love the original version of this song, but when I heard this cover, it spoke to me and felt it fi.. read moreI love the original version of this song, but when I heard this cover, it spoke to me and felt it fit this piece well.. I am glad it took you back to a lovely memory and touched you E... thank you for sharing that treasured memory and for this wonderful review.. It is always so nice to see you my sweet friend.. ((hugs)) to ya...
A rather poignant and introspective piece..description in the last verse shows the strengths of this piece, definitely fight and move toward a better light...great pen!
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Thank you Fran.. move towards a better light huh?... why didn't I think of that... lol
I am gl.. read moreThank you Fran.. move towards a better light huh?... why didn't I think of that... lol
I am glad you enjoyed..