If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[ANM]

Words placed together make writing and you do it so well!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you.. I am glad that you enjoyed this piece...

[ANM]

Your welcome and I did enjoy it!

[Sunya]

Never saw angels that way :p haha delicious dreams :D gosh you just made my mouth water ;) such beautiful use of words :) your poems take me to a playground

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you... I admit, this one was just playing with words... (yes the flashy kind)... and ideas... it just came flowing out... I am glad you enjoyed and that I could make your "mouth water"... made me giggle.... :)

[Sunya]

Dont take what i said about the flashy kind as a negative thing :) i am just bad at using words like you do :D

[AprilRN1210]

I was teasing you... being playful... I didn't... no worries... and you are hardly bad... especially from what I have seen... so shush!!

[Aries]

I like the free-spirited style to this, and as I'm finding with your writing, a love for fonts and playful formatting... I take from this a nod to an artistic healthy detachment from ordinary thinking; as if we were to merely take a moment and ponder the meaning of not a word's implications on the physical realm, but any single word's effect to sway us intellectually or emotionally when properly utilized. Captivating, indeed. :)

[AprilRN1210]

Isn't amazing how one carefully placed word can make the biggest difference?... You are so correct on this insight... thank you... I am glad that you enjoyed my pondering.... yes, I am a sucker for visual aesthetics as well as sounds, thoughts, and words.. they all have their unique effect and when used together can be powerful...

[stars are far]

Those words were wonderfully set together, thats so elegant, i loved it :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much for this kind words.. I am glad that you enjoyed..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

April you have described you so well in this lovely gentle piece. The angel stanza especially!

[AprilRN1210]

awwwww, well thank you.. I was just thinking one day and scribbled this out.. (was more daydreaming instead of listening to boring surgeon talk just to hear himself speak)... but we will keep that our secret... You are very sweet.. :)

[R Smith]

you are all of the above and more, well written and beautiful poem

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much for your kind, thoughtful words, I appreciate them.. I am glad that you enjoyed this one:)

[Jetta Zippora]

I have a love affair with words not used in everyday vocabulary and this poem is fantastically put together with some of my favorite words in the English language. Whimsical and serendipitous! Very nice write, friend. :) Experimenting with words is so fun and one of the best parts of writing.

[AprilRN1210]

Now, you make me blush... thank you so much.. I am glad you like this one.. I admit it is definitely one of my favorites that I have done... ok... now I am off to read your pieces... excited!!

[Blogger]

I like this. Your style is diverse I see.

[AprilRN1210]

I like to play around with a little bit of everything.. comes back to that curious spirit, and loving a challenge... I love to learn and how else can you do that if you don't try some of everything?... I am glad you liked it sir... :)

[Blogger]

I am not sure what section of this that I liked the best. The part about the flower, or the part about the dream. Both were nice.

[AprilRN1210]

well, thank you again sir:)

[J Todd Underhill]

Alright this one would do for our regular segments

[Wayne Rockmore]

D****t, April, you're too good! I don't know how you come up with these poems or how you got the mastery of language that you clearly have, but it is impressive. You're use of rhyme and alliteration make this poem such a compelling, beautiful read. I am a fan! Great work!

[AprilRN1210]

Wahoooo! I have a FAN!!.... Thank you so much for this AWESOME review... I haven't mastered any language, TRUST me, but I do love playing with it.. I am so thrilled you like it.. I appreciate you taking the time to check out my work.. ok.. back to celebration... wahooo!... :)