If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Fran Marie]

This is quite beautiful in its ethereal essence...I like the flowing verses explaining each (if I were)a soft and lovely piece of writing....

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you again, Fran.. Your reviews are quite lovely and encouraging.. I am glad you enjoyed this one.. It is one of my favorites.. just a random scribble.. love how that happens sometimes.. :)

[Rene Salinas]

Transformation. I had missed this lately I have been competing intently what an Irony I hated competition throughout all my life and as soon as I discover poetry I have competed more than ever before. Not sure if you are the intellectual type or even if you are in the right frame of mind to entertain a concept. But it was hard to read this without thinking of The Metamorphosis of Plants by Ghoethe. As your wrting delicately describes aspects of life which require sight. Not just any either. Best explained as that process they do when they show you the growth of a plant in quick motion.

All that happens in between so fast is some of what is written here Ghoethe called them etheric forces but hey ... . Every description is like a jump that carries within the object of transformation from star (divine wish) to flower (a thought) to angel ( a bridge) to dream ( environment) to thought (action) it is deeply founded in hope for something to come.


We live and hope


Thankyou

[AprilRN1210]

What a profound concept.. I love it... wow, Rene.. so insightful and wise.. I love the way you have broken it down and explained.. never really thought of it like that, but makes perfect sense.. the transformations in life are so subtle sometimes, that if you aren't paying attention, you miss it... and sometimes even if you are paying attention you miss the meaning.. thank you for this awesome food for thought and review... you are pretty awesome sir..

[Rene Salinas]

Can't claim that it is mine I took it from the book ! I am an expert at pibbybacking."If you steal from one author, it's plaigiarism; if you steal from many, it's research."

[AprilRN1210]

haha! love that saying.. well, you carry it off well, my friend.. and always seem to find the most insightful way of deciphering other's works.. I always look forward to your reviews... as well as reading your thoughts on friends' pieces.. they either make me think or they make me giggle, and occasionally do both :)

[Avinash]

Wishful thinking with a drifting affect. I think it is all about holding on to all dreams as long as you can and we never know when the tides turn and they become reality.....

[AprilRN1210]

ahhh yes, beautiful daydreams from that "hopeless romantic" inside my head.. she likes to be heard sometimes.. just drifting in and out of consciousness with her scribbles... you are correct, you never know.. thank you sir:)

[Ty]

Very well written. It moves so gracefully with no intentions of before or after. It's focus is on the present. An incredible piece.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much Ty... I am glad you enjoyed my "random scribble".... you are very kind.. :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

I'm digging the celestial theme...I love the imagination..if I were a thought..to me, in use, I think that's a great line

[AprilRN1210]

I am tickled you are "digging it" my friend.. Thank you :)

[Enayet1999]

If i were star, I'd dream of you every night.
Well done, a brilliat poem!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you..

[DJ]

Smooth and flowing,amplifying each thought,nice write.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you sir... Glad you enjoyed my scribble... was just random thoughts... :)

[JJHII]

Perfect just perfect. I have nothing else I can say,so I guess you made me speechless. Very rarely does this happen. ((hugs))

[AprilRN1210]

Speechless, huh?... wow... thank you... I am glad you enjoyed my scribbles... :)

[Christopher Robin]

I believe you're gaining a mastery of the ABCB couplet style and this is a fantastic example. The meter in this one is almost perfect! Loved the imagery, vivid, vivacious, never ostentatious ;)

Wondrously penned

-Robin

[AprilRN1210]

You always find a sneaky way to make me giggle, don't you?.. Thank you for that.. I needed the laugh.. I AM a beginner and this is one of my earlier pieces, so yes, was trying to learn one of the "basic" rhyme schemes first before tackling more challenging feats.. I am tickled that you enjoyed it.. :)
thank you again for all of your help... I appreciate your skillful advice and your precious time..

[KurKota]

This is a fantastic depiction of a mind just floating around in the world of random thoughts, feelings, and emotion.....really good, not only in the words and format, but the mood of your mind in that moment that it conveys.

[AprilRN1210]

my mind was surely just floating at the time... thank you for such a lovely, glowing review.. I am glad that you enjoyed it... it is one of my favorite scribbles... I appreciate your time and opinion...