If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Centfie]

At the first read, I like the suspense. It seems endless. It flows so wonderfully because of the rhyme. If I were I poem...this is it.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you!

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the thoughts in this one, and the form is very well done. I realized after the fact that I just posted a poem If -- so completely different from yours -- If only I could come up with another title ...

[AprilRN1210]

lol... since I have posted this poem I have noticed about four other poems get posted with the same title, but completely different.. quite funny.. you are so talented and unique that everything you do is pretty dang cool... Thanks for the read and lovely review:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks a lot for the kind words.

[AprilRN1210]

You're quite welcome.. just stating the facts:)

[Nusquam Esse]

I was drawn to the title on this one, something so simple, but filled with a myriad of possibility. With each 'what if', I found myself drawn into the poem, anticipating an answer to a simple but powerful question; a question which was never answered. (Such a tease) Since it was never answered, it leaves the question hanging, all the more powerful. This reminds me of Neruda's 'El libro de las preguntas", in that each question is vague, unanswered, and ranges from profound, surreal, and blissful naivety. I did also appreciate the subtle rhyme scheme that you kept here.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it.. I always appreciate your insight and your opinion :)

[PeterTrust]

"Magnetic Illusion"...Is what this poem is. Simply Perfect

[AprilRN1210]

Why, thank you for this lovely review.. I appreciate it. I am glad that you liked it.. :)

[PearlPoet]

If I were a poet... I would write you verses showing you how beautiful this poem is..
but I am not... ~~~~~~~~~~hugs~~~~~~~~~

[AprilRN1210]

If I were smart, I could see the compliment in that and thank you.... but I am not.....

[PearlPoet]

~sigh~ I wasnt trying to be smart.... I really liked your poem... just cant find the words to tell you...

[AprilRN1210]

sigh~ you missed my sarcasm:P

I caught the meaning behind what you were saying, I was just being sassy (sorry, a bad habit)

[Ranger Kessel]

nice read and presentation! thanks!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you kindly.

[Kt k]

I love the style of this poem how you start each stanza with if i where a.... Followed by words to describe i was reading your bio and saw that you where a nurse i hope to be a nurse when im older (I'm 16 now) and hope also to be a writer so it was refreshing to see a older version of what i aspire to be your work is lovely keep on writing :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much for this lovely review... I appreciate it.. That is wonderful! We need more caring and competent nurses! Good luck:)

[Lydia Shutter]

I liked the wonderful wordplay and the change of font style in this one. The rhyming added a nice spice to your words. Good one, April. Lydi**

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you very much, ma'am! I admit this one was FUN:)

[People Are Amazing]

Very clever use of words.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you:)

[Frieda P]

Reading your poetry April, I think you must be all of the above, and a little bit naughty don't forget! ;)

[AprilRN1210]

Who could forget that ma'am? That is incredibly sweet, thank you!

[Woody]

I read it a few times and I still can't decide which of those I wish you'd be. a wonderful set of ifs.
I may have a preference for the angel, though.

[AprilRN1210]

Awwww, thank you Woody! I can be every now and again, but as Frieda just mentioned, my naughty side has to come out:)
It is always a pleasure to have you stop by, I appreciate it...

[Woody]

you're welcome A. I don't mind a good nurse with a naughty streak :)

[AprilRN1210]

lol.... I'm glad:)