If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Derek29]

Whoa....
This is a way good poem.
Significantly brilliant, erotic, enjoyable, and captivating.
Marks at some of the best. Highly passable as O-style poetry.
Thank you for making this world a better, better place, to live in.

[AprilRN1210]

wow... not sure what O-style poetry is, but will say thank you anyways:)
I am glad you enjoyed.. it is nice to meet you..

[Derek29]

Sure. It's a pretty good poem.

[JD Jessop]

Outstanding! Straight to the point without wasted words and very sophisticated. Loved it~

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much. I am tickled you enjoyed my scribbles.. I appreciate the read and review:)

[willweb]

This was enchanting April, such nice thoughts. It is fun to sit and ponder things like this, but to have the ability to write them out so nicely...well that is all you my friend.

[AprilRN1210]

Shhhh, don't tell, but was actually daydreaming at work and scribbled this down.. I agree---it is fun to sit and just ponder ideas such as these... Thank you for this lovely review, you are so sweet!.. I am glad you enjoyed my scribble... :)

[MAC]

and if i were a poet, i would very much wish to be able to write this.....perfect!!!

[AprilRN1210]

That is very kind of you. I am so glad you enjoyed my daydream.. thank you.. I appreciate it.. nice to see you:)

[Jen]

My God April, you created such poem. That's nice. Super likes to all the stanzas. You wish to be all the positive things and the poem generates positive energy as well.

Well, you know i need to understand one thing that's stanza 3 :-
bewitching enticement
both sinful and divine.

will you please explain it all? 'Cause angels are the godly things, how they can be shown beguiling human beings and enticing sinful things as well???

Thank you so much for sharing with me, this excellent piece of art. keep it up (y)

[AprilRN1210]

thank you. I am glad you enjoyed.

[AprilRN1210]

this was a scribble that I wrote while daydreaming at work to be interpreted as the reader sees fit.. not a vessel to get into a philosophical, religious debate... take it how you wish..

[wordsofheart]

That's a wonderful piece of writing. The use of words is very good. The rhyming is perefct. On a whole,amazing. Keep it up!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for this lovely review---not sure how I missed it... my apologies.. it is nice to meet you. would love to return the favor, is there a specific piece you would like me to read?

[wordsofheart]

My pleasure. It's okay. Nice to meet you too.
Well,it's your wish entirely.Thanks :)

[Lola_Bee]

lovely poetry! so soft and fantastical. makes me feel or romantic inside :-)

[AprilRN1210]

thank you so much.. I am glad you enjoyed this scribble... was daydreaming at work:)

[Eleanor]

"If"
The title itself attracted my attention.
You painted the words on the screen like a painters paints its canvas.
The choice of words is great! Beautiful poem :)

[AprilRN1210]

well hello!.. nice to meet you.. thank you for this lovely review, I am so glad you enjoyed.. I would love to return the favor.. is there a specific piece you would like me to read?..

[Eleanor]

This want suppose to be a favour :p
I really liked this one, that's the reason I reviewed it.
Though if you want to you can read whichever piece you want :) something which attracts your attention like this one did mine :)

[Eleanor]

And BTW hello :)
Nice to meet you too.

[Laura Lynn]

Pretty font! Ah, so this is what it is to feel like the brightest elements of our world, the earth...

[AprilRN1210]

thank you.. if only.... :)