If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Persona]

Good but it'd be really nice if you had a concluding sentence that wrapped up all these thoughts together

[AprilRN1210]

I appreciate you opinion, but this was a lingering thought that just trailed through my mind and sometimes those thoughts don't get wrapped up in a shiny little bow in a neat package-they are just that-random and lingering, trailing off into nowhere.... but thank you....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

If I were an Angel
alluring mankind
bewitching enticement
both sinful and divine.

That is my kind of angel… there is no doubt you are all those things.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for those sweet words, Dale. :)

Yep, my kind of Angel--perfect blend of naughty and nice--sugar and spice!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is what I am saying :))

[AprilRN1210]

I was agreeing with you sir!..... I think I am a little more spice than sugar though... Some like it hot thankfully :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh I know you were agreeing, I was just confirming… yes spicy is good.

[AprilRN1210]

ok, just checking! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Your poetry is fascinating. It really does stimulate, excite and provoke thoughts. This was a gem of a writing with creativity...:)................

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much, Sami! That is what I aim to do sir! Yours is always so deep, meaningful, and thought-provoking it amazes me.. I can only aspire to do the same:)
As always, I appreciate your time and opinion my friend...

[Sami Khalil]

Much obliged. You are welcome...:).........................

[Matching Socks]

Agree with Ron.
You're ALL THAT...
...and then some. :)

Pleasure to read this, flowed so nice. Like a dream.

[AprilRN1210]

You are too kind girl, thank you so much! making me blush now:)

[ron]

Yes you are all of the what if's and more.
Love the poem.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for your sweet words, Ron:)

[ron]

You are most welcome sweet April :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of the word "If". The possibilities we could be if we had the opportunity. Nice flow of thoughts in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for your kind words;)

[MsJewel]

I love this creative little gem!

:) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you, Julie:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really enjoy the wording in this, the alliteration...i believe this piece can stand on its own with the wording....not a real fan of all the different colors and such..

but really like the theme...

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you, Jacob. I was just playing around with it to see what I think.. Honestly, I think I agree with you.. As always, I appreciate your honesty and opinion:)

[Trace]

A lot of thought and care went into the creation of this introspective piece.

Nicely done. I often think
If I were a rich man......

But I have poetry and friends. ... and though I am not wealthy
I am rich.

Trace

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you, Trace:)