On The Road

Thin sound heart-strings
Are already tuned.
Daisy, we're parting,
As I am leaving soon.
Drums, guitars...
Restless stars
Chase change and motion
In search for world renown.
And when I cross the ocean,
You'll feel a little down.
But I am gone.
So, please, hold on.

 

Yes, your heart explodes,
But my life is shows,
Music, concerts, benders
With all my rocking friends.
My true home is roads,
If you love me so,
You will quell your anger,
Await me till the end
Again.

 

Life is a hurry -
Days and weeks have passed.
Daisy, don't worry,
As I am back at last.
But soon I'll leave,
And, please, don't grieve.

 

Yes, your heart explodes,
But my life is shows,
Music, concerts, benders
With all my rocking friends.
My true home is roads,
If you love me so,
You will quell your anger,
Await me till the end.

 

You can't deprive me
Of all this drive.
Music is all my life.

 

Yes, your heart explodes,
But my life is shows,
Music, concerts, benders
With all my rocking friends.
My true home is roads,
If you love me so,
You will quell your anger,
You'll wait for me.

 

Yes, your heart explodes,
But my life is shows,
Music, concerts, benders
With all my rocking friends.
My true home is roads,
If you love me so,
You will quell your anger,
Await me till the end.
Again.

Reviews

[The Old Ashes]

I really loved the flow of it, the "beat" per say. I felt like I was listening to a song.
I liked not only the story you tell us, but the story of the structure of the poem itself. It is very well versed and laid out.
At first I didn't know if I liked the fourth line of the "chorus" persay,
"Music, concerts, benders,
with all my rocking friends." For some reason with how mature and flowing the rest of the poem was, that sort of seemed off-- but then I realized that I think thats why it fits in. It shows his immaturity.
Favorite verse was that imagery at the beginning:
Thin sound heart-strings
Are already tuned.
Daisy, we're parting,
As I am leaving soon.
Drums, guitars...
Restless stars
Chase change and motion
In search for world renown.


I don't know if you're a musician, but I think a song needs to be written from this poem.
Great work April. 100/100
-Ashes

[ErrWaves]

i loved the first stanza especially the lines "Thin sound heart-strings Are already tuned. " and "Drums, guitars... Restless stars" which give the allusion that music is life. excellent, well done.