Spindrift

Stand back,

take in the full

measure of my

mountainous resolve.

 

Trace it’s craggy

surface, let fingers

cram fistfuls of

fireflies in cracks and

crevices, breath

disturb spindrift.

 

Abseil my

wavering will,

creep, clamber,

weave, vine like

in, out and around

legs and ankles,

sweep my feet

from the floor and

flower all over me.

 

Reviews

[cartera]

A very good poem from someone who is obviously a very good poet. Your word choice is thematic and keeps the whole metaphor going. Abseiling over someone's will is an interesting concept/idea. Must try it sometime, but rather suspect it could be dangerous if the person did not share my views on rock climbing.
Wherever these words are coming from - keep them coming.
Well done.
Alex.

[Hello, Goodbye]

absolute.. resolute conviction in this poetic expression.. your wordage is enviable..

[Narnie]

I hope you haven't gone away from here or there. This is simply gorgeous and the flow, movement, sentiment is sublime.

[mope]

Wow what a meta-phwoar!!

[Michael X]

wow, I always find myself a fan or your intellect, especially your ending lines,
this poem has ain air of mystique in lighthearted ways,
excellent job Ms Child :)

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Wow. You can feel each verse, and each line...

weave, vine like
in, out and around
legs and ankles,
sweep my feet
from the floor and
flower all over me.

Love it! Great job...

[PianoandPage]

yay for making me learn new words! abseil. mmmm. i love when words totally encompass an image.

the entire last stanza is so alive, it rushes on its own energy and climaxes with such gentle force. i was swept away.

i love how you use rough textures and yet maintain your fierce femininity through this. "i'm tough but conquer me anyway".

you write beautifully and brilliantly.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I would call this abstract spirituality... it like someone who enjoys being grounded and yet wants to take the world by storm.

[Marlena]

I really loved this, I mean, it's kind of beautiful. Your word choices are perfect. :3 Great work :)