Cat and Canvas

Rhythmic rain

pounds on roof,

eye to eye in

tongue and groove,

lying still, 

shallow breath,

smoky fingers

run through hair

music whispers

in my ear. I

submit to

purple haze.

 

 

Through closed lids

I watch you.

Lithe and limber

like a panther

circle, slowly

closing in,

panting on

my exposed

canvas. Brush

strokes, black 

stain, falling

fringe sweeps

skin, rendered

submissive to

your design

I am branded,

happy to be,

painted prey.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

A stirring read. I love the drama and art of the moment and I love the execution of the whole, the word choice and the drama of the taut language which complements that of the moment. And yet despite the obvious sensuality there is also a serenity about it all, a contentment at the commitment to art. 'Rhythmic rain' just two words but they set the scene well as they inject the poem with an instant dynamism and elemental energy. 'Pounds' is a great verb and engages our hearing. Hearts also pound. 'Tonge and groove' is also evocative. 'Lying still' is a strong contrast to 'Pounding rain'. 'Shall breath' denotes excitement, urgency. Yet we are lying still! Hair/eyes/ears...the senses engage with the sensuous. Ach, and purple haze...we see the excitemant of Jimbo with his axe. And at the same time a cloud of calmness. Verse two gets even stronger. 'Through closed lids' suggests that, while lying still, there may be a little reverse hunting going on. 'Lithe ... to ... exposed canvass' paints a picture of the painter at work. But, it is the last nine and a half lines which are the best as they give us a clear view of the rush of feelings that are simultaneously going on in your mind. 'Rendered submissinve to your design' is a great bit of phrasing. And one just knows that in the submission there is a tremendous power also. 'Branded and happy' are also strong and pleasing verbs. I'd say there is not a word wasted in this cat-springing piece of writing. Great stuff.

[Murphy]

panting...painting...pointing...up...wow.

[Michael X]

The artful conclusion of a blank canvas, your words are capturing, imaginatively colorful, passionate
and this is sensuous, delving, subtle vision of mystique. Wow

[Angel's Lady]

Oh nicely done! This is beautiful! And definitely going in my Favorites!

rendered
submissive to
your design
I am branded,
happy to be,
painted prey.

Perfect!

[a]

The voice of an artist. Like in a good film, or a book. Great work here. The language is simple, pure and well formed. Interesting way of building the verses. The second stanza is amazing, especially
"I am branded,
happy to be,
painted prey"

Thank you very much for sharing!

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

wonderful, amazig how you do it again, paint a big smile on my face :-) Yossi

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow this is fabulous... a beautiful dream like sequence... the subtle hint of passion as a fantasy becomes your muse.