wow. i love the sort of abstract rearranging of these 3 things. this is what i love about art. how it's about taking the ordinary and shifting them about. changing the order.
i read this as sort of 3 things we tie to relationships....
each has multiple meaning which works great as the emphasis and image changes with each stanza.
the last stanza almost makes me thing that the writer has a sort of wry humor about the way relationships are and/or end. that no matter how you try to mix things up .... "it's sad and makes no sense".
very creative!
i would love to take this stanza by stanza but i'm fighting yet another cold and my head is fuzzy. i will later on.
I really like what I have seen of your work on here so far, its so different to everything else.
Even though it say "it's sad and, makes no sense
" I don't think it's sad and I think it makes perfect sense. She is sad because he is not there with her, not because he is not there anymore, and it does not make any sense because it's a new and strange feeling how she feels, not in total control, not 100% secure, but it feels good and that to her does not make any sense
But what do I know?
Good job
Straight on, it would seem the flowers are a too-late make-up attempt.
Be that as it may, I really enjoy the rest of the tilt, since I'm not sure anything makes any particular sense, even when it seems on the up and up! ;-)
I'm sitting on the keyboard, typing with my eyelid. . .
wow. the word scramble was a great foreshadow to the final stanza. the emotions i projected onto the character were mutliple:
scorned lover, cheating girlfriend, girlfriend cheated on, were the flowers from a liar or to a liar. i could see it both ways. it could also be utter indifference with no traumatic event (which would be the saddest of all).
this piece has the ability for the reader to inject their own meaning. a meaning pulled from a multitude of personal events. great job.
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