First Date

My short term memory

is not what it used to be

I don’t remember

details, such as what

I had for breakfast yesterday

or the name of the actor

in that show, you know the

one, he’s married to

what’s her name

 

But I do remember how

the sides of your mouth

crease into the slightest dimples

when you smile

 

That you have a mole on

the right side of your neck

 

And how I wanted to

climb inside your shirt

mould myself to your chest

and just breathe.

 

Funny, I don’t recall your shoes…

Reviews

[fireblossom]

Another wonderful poem. You like to add little tags at the end...the twister...and it works well often. We must be careful with those however as they can detract from the pictures that lead to the end. Our poems very often mean something else to the reader...tags can leave them feeling done wrong. :-)

The tag here isn't a definition however...it is a twist...a colorful refrain. Very well done.

[The Flawed]

Yet again that style of yours, make wish that I could view the world through your eyes,
But what do I know?
An absolute breath of fresh air,
Well done

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Ha!!.... thats so sweet , I have the same kind of memory , I hardly ever remember things , but can remember silly ones in romantic moments , you made me smile :-) .... maybe he never had shoes Ha! ... Yossi

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awesome poem dude!..better than mine

[Jessica O.]

Well done! This piece made me think back to my very first date ever. I don't recall much of it except it involved ice cream...

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Ah memory has a way of grabbing little pieces and making its own collage doesn't it!? I like this - the playful and sexy tease it has..... Truly, isn't it funny what our mind or our heart or our eye just catches and keeps....

Kath

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Nice! Clever wordplay and original humor. I know and understand the feeling. Good write.....

[Collodi]

A cute piece about memory, focused on the intensity of those things that draw your intention in love. Simple, sweet, with heart. Interesting.

[Greystone]

This is very cute. Short-term memory loss, with perks!!! XD I loved the overall flow and word choice--this was very well written. Really cheered me up?

[Kt]

This is very good. I really enjoy how it gets serious and then the last line makes it funny. Good job.