Proceed with Caution

Shall we…

 

tango in red through bulls

play roulette in Russia

yodel in the Himalayas

surf the Tokyo bullet train

tread croc’s backs across the Nile

skip through fields in Angola

 

or should we just fall in love?

 

   

Reviews

[Solst Rapture]

It's an interesting poem...there is a tension...overall it seems to convey that falling in love is less risky and more tangible perhaps than all the other potential suggestions. It's a lovely idea. My favorite images are:

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tango in red through bulls (Although i had to read it twice to ensure I read it right, I adored the image afterwards.

play roulette in Russia (Russia was a clever choice of Country to use I think. It made it feel far more dangerous)

yodel in avalanche country (I wonder if you could choose an avalanche country here - I think it'd make it much better)

surf the Tokyo bullet train (Clear image and a wonderfully quick image. Specific too, which explains my last point about the last line)

tread croc's backs across the Nile (Once again, it's such an adventurous poem - love the images)

skip through fields in Angola (I think this is my downfall because I don't conjure up a clear image of Angola. Is it war struck, famine struck, etc. But that's probably my lack of knowledge...if it was Iraq, it'd be stark)

or should we just fall in love?

Very good. Great Imagery and a careful choice of words. I'd reconsider Avalanche country. All the best.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

INSPIRING! I have an idea for the end of a piece I'm working on now! Oh, and I'd rather do all that other s**t you named as oppose to falling in love!
Great write!

I love your visuals and risks. This concept was great! I only wished I'd thought of it first....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

fabulous little write... of all the risks love is the biggest and yet the one that also brings the most joy... very witty and fun.

[R J Askew]

Yes, it is dangerous...and exciting! Very witty. 'Oh, go on then!'

[Samuel Dickens]

Is "all of the above" not a choice? I think I could interpret this a couple of different ways. Your few words say much.

[PianoandPage]

i've missed it here. this is the first poem i've read on WC since my latest hiatus and i love it! it's great. another quick romantic piece.

i almost wanted this line to read "play roulette WITH russia" but it works as it is.

otherwise i love the kinetic energy and imagery of this piece.

[Larissa G.]

How true; the game of love as dangerous as the ideas mentioned before it.
Well thought.

[Angel's Lady]

haha Yep, you pretty much summed it all because, falling in love, baby, is some seriously dangerous stuff! Great write, April!

[Ralphy]

Another ending I didn't expect from you but those death defying have nothing that would make me pass up falling in love. Nothing can move mountains, divid an ocean, soar in the sky or sparkle in space like two people learning and exploring their love. Nice write.

[Dani California]

haha! I agree with Kath... you do this well. Very clever indeed.

We do tend to overcomplicate, don't we?

Great write!