Wild Flower Bouquet

Following the river

treading tousled grass

senses are tickled and teased. 

My mind sighs and releases

a clutch of black balloons

into the sky 

an untidy trail of heavy layers

lie scattered behind

dischord discarded

step by step 

as I am drawn deeper

into this florid flora

resonant rushes

send me tumbling

through a wild flower bouquet.

Reviews

[JohnL]

What a lovely poem, and what a good description of the ability of flowers to lift the black balloons of gloom from our souls.
I remember commenting to an elderly engineer many years ago that I was going to the Isle of Anglesey in May. He said -"Remember to look through the grass, son." I did and was amazed at the wild flowers just blow the growin grass - you had to look - but not too hard. Who says engineers are not poets at heart? I have never forgotten his words. Your more summery flowers are more overt but no less uplifting. Splendid metaphors and great happiness received from your poem,
John

[kollaboratyve]

I like this piece-very colorful and full of imagery-good write!!!!!!

[R J Askew]

Love the black balloons...it is just such an unusual line...and the black underscores the optimism of the flowers and visa versa. Thee is movement in the poem, which is sensuous and charming.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Something as simple as running through flowers with your head in the clouds and your arms would have to be out at your sides and your eyes would have to be closed and there would be some spinning involved..... Lovely image here - offer up those flowers and this carefree plan here.....

Kath

[PianoandPage]

i love your gentle use of alliteration.

"treading tousled"

"dischord discarded"

this has a nice peaceful sort of energy that doesn't draw us into drowsy dreams. it pops and plays with a mature innocence. a recapturing of how nature can thrall.

[Larissa G.]

Very simple and yet incredibly gorgeous.
I actually wish there was more for me to take in, I enjoyed this so thoroughly.
Well done on all aspects of your writing. :)

[Angel's Lady]

Gorgeous photograph to go with a beautifully written poem...true poetry in motion! Nicely done. You make me want to gather a whole armload and go walking with you!

[~angelalala~]

playful and enchanting. flows smoothly. i like the image of 'black balloons' being released into the sky. written so well as to make me feel i am running through the flowers with you.