Woven Words and Soothing Swathes

My Soothing Swathes in response to Murph's Woven Words.. his text is black mine is grey.

Woven words

spun for you

whisper softly

from the loom

 

Awake to the sound

of silky tones

fine filaments

caress my ear

 

Each memory

a fastened warp

for a new weft

making room

 

Rustling bolts

of swishing silk

soothing swathes

pervade the air

 

Back and forth

in willowy knit

unfulfilled dreams

become known

 

This wonderful weave

our tapestry

wafts over me

fine as hair

 

As threads entwined

in rhythmic dance

find life in the

mesmeric drone

 

Drops and drapes

across my curves

gossamer sheet

of us I wear

 

…Fabric of you

   fabric of me

   fabric of us

  fabric of we

 

 

 

Reviews

[J. James Reider]

I didn't read your heading before reading your work.... I had no idea this was written by two seperate people, it seemed like it came from one mind! I have never thought of writing with someone else, so you just expanded my horizon! There is so much powerful imagery here that it is easy to get lost in the piece.... I always love reading poems that you can get lost in, it is kind of like being carried on a mystic wave! A very brilliant piece at the apex of literary marvel! Awesome job!

[Lyra H]

I love the rhythm of this poem, great work!

[Christina2]

I didn't realize it was 2 diff. people either. What a creation- well thought out/planned it seems to me, it works well together, a conversation, now that I read it again, played out almost like from balcony to ground, a Romeo and Juliet... (smile) Deep. Great share.

[poddar kushal]

"Awake to the sound /of silky tones"-beautiful expressions. you have worked this to the perfection and you deserve a standing ovation

[Phill Oz O'fee]

A rhythmically pulsating juxtaposition of thoughts and phases, envelop and carry the reader, to a singularity of relationship! A very special place.

Excellent corroboration!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful collaberation.....This flows really well, You's make an excellant team. I really liked the last stanza...BRILLIANT!!

[Rylan Batten]

I really liked the mood, which was helped a lot by the wording, even even with the italics--good sense of layout. The tempo to this is really nicely done as well. Altogether a really good poem, thanks for putting this up

[R J Askew]

Great job, the warp and weft of this knit well together and I think the last verse is lovely, gentle and intimate.

[Travis Lawrence]

So peaceful, I can visualize and feel it all.

"This wonderful weave
our tapestry
wafts over me
fine as hair"

It's like there is a blanket of soft hair over me as I read this, and it's comfortable. Thank you this was the peace I needed right now (just got home from work a bit ago). Great write, wonderful response, I believe I'll save it :-)

-Travis

[Tenten]

the combination is beautiful and the imagery still captivates me, its a gentle soothing piece and i still love it. the last lines are my favorite.

[Caitbabie008]

good write!