I didn't read your heading before reading your work.... I had no idea this was written by two seperate people, it seemed like it came from one mind! I have never thought of writing with someone else, so you just expanded my horizon! There is so much powerful imagery here that it is easy to get lost in the piece.... I always love reading poems that you can get lost in, it is kind of like being carried on a mystic wave! A very brilliant piece at the apex of literary marvel! Awesome job!
this has so many levels to it.. the weaving of two poets words to describe two peoples woven lives and the word choices.. perfection! Love the ending as well. Beautifully done by two amazing talents!
This is a very refreshing poem. Again, quite exotic, symbolic and very sexy. I can feel the sheer of it all. I like and want as my thoughts run wild. nice write.
Posted 16 Years Ago
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Well written piece and good use of symbolism. I like your dual voice concept as well. (I have done a similar piece called Whisper a few years back, but this one beats my poem by a few lightyears). You have great rhythm and form, and the imagery and choice of words paints a very good picture.
I love how you explored the imagery of fabric and wove it (pun intended) into your poem, going beyond the worn out expressions of affection and promises of love.
I love words and I like to write poems. Sometimes words just come and I don't know where from but I write them down anyway. There's something very powerful in the written word. It shows you where y.. more..