Love Restored

A response to Murph�s �Love Restored�. His words are in the black type and mine follow in grey�

I built a fortress

to shield my hopes

to protect my chivalrous dreams

 

I happened on a

towering wall

that reached so high it blocked the light

 

Yet this work of my hands

contained a slight breach

and was not as strong as it seemed

 

Rough and cold

I traced its face

my fingers found a tiny chink

 

For in the blink of an eye

and with quivering lips

my defenses were conquered for sure

 

I put my mouth

to that weak place

eyes closed I blew a breathy kiss

 

As my still beating heart

in a big puddle lay

on this day that love was restored

 

And with a sigh

and gentle tremor

that wall did crumble into dust

Reviews

[SweetPeachesAlways]

awwww....I like this...different but good!

[waywithwords]

You give into love is such an explicit way. Great imagery and it works so well. You kept me the reader on the edge of my seat. Again well, well written and thank you for sharing it. xxx

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

This is nice - I like the way it goes back and forth - there is no doubt that the wall is coming down! There is no need any longer.... be open and be receptive to all that comes with this feeling of hope and the promise of what is to come, what is to share.... keep the chinks and dents - they make us real - they make us share what is vulnerable which, to me, shows that I want you to know me - all of me - and when you can be that open, well, you can expect more and you usually get more.... like this a great deal.... makes me smile.

Kath

[R J Askew]

It's a very positive theme, with the image of the wall crumbling uplifting as love triumphs. As I read this I could not help thinking of the wall being build through Palestine. I know this has nothing to do with the words of the poem. But the poem caused the though in me. If only love and collaboration could break out in other spheres we might all be happier!

[Phil Sanders]

How beautiful .. the two go so well together ...

[J.P.O.et]

Oh thank you for this read April
I love this colaborative and beautifull thing you two have here
You so expertly answered with ways only a true woman can
I really enjoy these, 'a breathy kiss', ah indeed
J.P.O.et

[Forest Green]

Nice lines all the way through...a very good blend.

Excellent work to both writers.

Daniel

[Keith]

beautiful image...
waiting...almost anticipating the outcome without knowing how it would materialize.
perhaps just becoming to familiar with your ever present optimism and positivity.
still climax, even through the predictability,was delivered
nice theme.

[Amanda]

what wonderful responses to murphy's parts! i love the way it answered his and it flows nicely. such a splendid job done.

Always,

Amanda

[Larissa G.]

It's awesome. I had to read it a couple times, but then, I'm still tired from traveling. I love the way you responded - and Murph's is a great bit of work as well. Congrats to both of you.