Saturday Night Curiosity

Hot pants, cold pants, no pants

high heels, hair gel, lip gloss

testosterone

eau de ego

jostling

wearing spillage

 

Peacocks

strutting c***s

fighting c***s

c***s

 

Saturday night curiosity

at the trendy provincial bar

decides to go home and

watch X Factor on tv

exit through nicotine fog

 

The difference between decades passing

is feeling you’re missing out by staying in

and knowing you’re missing nothing.

Reviews

[SweetPeachesAlways]

ah yes...so true! I love the fast pace you set and the very visual images! ;)
Excellent piece of writing!

[Keith]

no... it just means your getting old.... lol

saw beuno be at a bar the other night... cuban crooner chicky poo salsa band in case you didn't know
... I didn't
no cover, great show, actually a decent band
I love it when I run into such novelties, reaffirms that you have to check out the bars occasionally, but just become better at assessing them quickly

[Sean M. Addams]

very entertaining piece .. love the humor in this

[PianoandPage]

i love the last lines. so true. very very very relatable.

Testosterone
Eau de ego
Jostling
Wearing spillage
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great! i love how these seperate things all sort of mesh into a mirage of drunken perfumed and chauvenist sloppiness. hah! you have amazing line breaks here. it felt like walking through your mind.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The activities, places and things we felt a novelty, although having an objective dimension, essentially exist in the subjective perceptions of our mind and imagination.

Your poetic perception, creatively highlights this poignant realisation. Excellent!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Oh, I love this... what a good summation of popping into most clubs! Sure is a people rush isn't it! Last time I was out, I was wishing I had something I could write stuff down on because I knew I wouldn't remember every wild thing I saw! This is such a hoot - love it!

kath

[Rain]

I absolutely loved this. Your words were perfect. The feel of it while I read it it was like watching it in motion. I had to laugh, because you were brilliant with your word usage. Great write. Rain..

[Tii-Nez]

This one I like. Telling what it's all about in a fun way. This piece seems to have just a bit of a jazzy feel...
no?

[R J Askew]

Great waft of worldly-wise weariness about this piece. 5 years clubbing and cool between the ages of say 23-28 is probably enough...you've got money to waste (borrowed) and have not yet quiet wised up. And of course 'men' of that age still have a desperate need to prove themselves. Love the way the first two verses capture a sort of physical deflation with the best line for me being 'Exit through nicotine fog' and the play on X factor.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Yip X factor it is.....so true, so many idiots out and about.....

A great piece!!! :)