Her Name is Desire

Second attempt at a sonnet, this one's a shakespearan

So hard to pinpoint the moment in time 

began this itch I endeavour to resist

intruding and threatening my sublime

yet tenacious this gnawing does persist

and what is this offensive inside me

gathering speed at an alarming rate

her name is desire, she grows like a weed

lifting and teasing to a heightened state

pulling me, wrenched from denial’s night

slipping, sliding, relinquishing control

thrust blinking into awakening light

cannot elude what is deep in your soul

sometime’s doing nothing’s doing something

sometime’s doing nothing’s not an option.

Author's Note

offensive in line 5 is meaning assault

Reviews

[Flow]

Bravo.. I love this one, just because I can feel it.. There are so many wonderful poems of yours to read.. I want to sit all day and just read, but my employer for some reason is insisting that I work hard for them today. uggggg.. Yet I love this poem of yours it is very tight and right on point~

[Karma]

-beautiful-

[Rain]

i like your sonnet :) i' haven't quite got those down, but yours are nice. My favorite lines:

Thrust blinking into awakening light
Cannot elude what is deep in your soul

i love the image of that first line especially.

[Keith]

stick to envy and sloth if you want to beat yourself up over theological values or idealogies...
otherwise, it is strange to ponder how every chemical in our body is designed to bring on euphoria eventually and as well that none are designed for the purpose of self loathing...a trained thought, not a natural chemical process.... I love my body... it likes to party... more pleasure over here please!

[Sean M. Addams]

very interesting piece very well written

[R J Askew]

this sonnet feels a little harder edged and chippier than the first one...it is more intimate and focuses on a change in one person. it's got inner conflict running through it and gives the reader a great insight into what's going on. And the conflict is worked out in the last two lines. Desire is the life force in play. But as you say, can be a weed! This one feels more modern than the Petrachian effort which was full of romantic elevation...this sonnet seems to have more psychological realism in it. More!

[Lisa Robertson]

I enjoyed your choice of words to describe "Awakening"

Quote:
"Thrust blinking into awakening light"

Keep up the good work
Write on!
Stardust

[Tomás Ó C..]

Youve used some tongue twiser language in this poem!!! Well written!!!

[Maria]

cool. looks good. maybe it's the same thing, but nothing. maybe it's the coolest thing in the freakin world