The Casual Click

You meet someone online and start passing messages... a few clicks later and you can't pass your screen without checking your inbox...

 

We have not met

I don’t know your face

don’t know your smell

and yet

I know you so very well

 

If we passed on the street

there’d be no recognition

our eyes might meet

but just as quickly

look away

maybe a glimmer

of Déjà vu

a nagging thought

do I know you

something familiar I can’t place

for we have met

though not in the flesh

our minds have explored

hidden depths

we met online

 

Some scoff and question

how can you be sure

you won’t find an axe

murderer at your door

 

We have no need to meet

our relationship is

complete in being incomplete

a hotline, a direct connection

mind to mind

mutual introspection

no shyness, shame, just raw essence

barriers down

no defence

a nameless, faceless fantasy

to punctuate the boredom

routine, the unseen enemy

 

Our exchanges come in bite sized bursts

like co-writing a song

verse by verse

composition, execution

click the send button

insecurity til the absolution

and in this moment while we wait

relishing the gloriousness

of the anticipate

at the mercy of the system’s speed

awaiting the response

like a delayed action tease

delicious though this anticipation

it is accompanied

by a certain frustration

always a fine line it seems

between opposing

emotions, desires, needs

wondering, hoping

did I please

is the dance still on

do we still play the game

am I continuing to flirt with pain

 

I don’t recall the moment

that the casual click

became loaded with intent

I let you in

dropped my guard

you got under my skin

and I don’t know where it will end

but I thank you

for being my internet friend

 

Reviews

[Marquise]

We have no need to meet
Our relationship is
Complete in being incomplete

Whew... I love the intent and direction of the poem, but this very like just blew me away for so many different reasons. Nit only in the Online community is this true, but even in social communities where people could know one another though a common purpose, but it never goes passed that purpose and that whats makes it so complete. you did a very good job explaining online friendships. Its funny, i bet we all wonder whats happening on the other side of the screen....

[Forest Green]

Truly wild...techno-relationships are provided some positive analysis...giving insight as to the driving force...!

I actually had a nice review already to send and I got kicked off the internet....;)) Now that is providence at work.

Great poem.

Daniel

Great form and wonderful use of opposite words that compliment. I think the popular line here is "complete in being incomplete".

This has a good message, use of words, form and rhythm.

A very good piece

[Erotic Goddess]

We have no need to meet
our relationship is
complete in being incomplete
a hotline, a direct connection
mind to mind
mutual introspection
no shyness, shame, just raw essence
barriers down
no defence
a nameless, faceless fantasy
to punctuate the boredom
routine, the unseen enemy

This, WOW, this is just perfect. I think you have taken thoughts that so many have had before and wrapped them into a package with a bow, something that we can sit down, open and look at, then put back to save for another day. This is an instant favorite!

~Stephanie

[JC Fox]

Great poem and it is so true, it seems that so many people have found love, friendship and what have you with just the click of a mouse.

[Christina2]

absolute truth
I am there with the words in reality, but yet it is only fantasy isn't it?
but the depth of the emotions of words exchanged and feelings felt will last a lifetime.

[Danielle Asher]

this is a wonderful piece. it makes you stop and think how true it is as you read and feel the intensity building. and in this moment while we wait

relishing the gloriousness

of the anticipate

at the mercy of the system's speed

awaiting the response

like a delayed action tease

delicious though this anticipation

it is accompanied

by a certain frustration

I loved these lines. I identified so much with these feelings and I am sure you captured the thoughts of many. I could have kept copying lines but the anticipation and frustration were my favorite.
thank you for sharing! great write.
peace,
danielle

[Yvonne Heidt]

I don't think that there is anything left original to say after reading your reviews! Except that I enjoyed it very much and completely related. Very well thought out and executed. Excellent job!

[SweetPeachesAlways]

This is perfect, isn't it? Excellent job! FANTASTIC! Superb! Awesome! Fabulous! Totally gnarly, dude!

We have not met
I don't know your face
don't know your smell
and yet
I know you so very well

How true...so very true...
A fantasically excellent, superbly awesome, and fabulously gnarly piece of writing!

Why, Ms. April, I do believe this is another genuine prime example of your total fantastic-ness!

[None]

You put emotions so well into form and place in your glorious poem! A hard subject to convey was mastered by you here.....
"Our exchanges come in bite sized bursts like co-writing a song verse by verse composition, execution
click the send button insecurity til the absolution and in this moment while we wait relishing the gloriousness of the anticipate"
...an exceptional poem showing our delight when someone takes the time to write!

[Murphy]

Oh, very nice... this is fantastic... like you haven't heard that yet. A transparent, curious exploration... I like it.