affect

a few fragments of thought

 

The wind covets
silent whispers of
autumn’s dark
secret as her circle
stirs in delight…
slipping…
sliding…
through a labyrinth
of cool streams
cleansing Aphrodite’s
long, strands
of ebony
while eyes undress
me in blushing hues of

yesterday…

Reviews

[Charles]

I've been browsing through your work this morning and am delighted to have come across it. Each poem is a study in imagery and sensuality. Really great lines in each of the 4-5 I've read. This one has a slightly different form (nice to see how you slip from one form to another with quiet grace) but is no less effective for the short lines and more direct wording. The only 'flaw' that stood out here was 'silent whispers' - a redundency it seems. The line works as well without 'silence' because a whisper, after all, is still a whisper... shhhhh. :-)

[SM Davis]

LOVE THIS!!!!! Of course I'm always akin to the abstract. This is perfect....just perfect.

[Von Halford]

I wish I could slip slide through cool streams with aphrodite

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"The wind covets
silent whispers of
autumn's dark"- Ah! Its so beautiful..
Its not just a piece of text but a painting itself...with each and every line representing a different color.
So beautifully painted :)

[Jmartins]

I think this poem was rlly good keep it up.. =)

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this piece alot .. your words flow so smoothly in this ..imagery is beautifully done in this....overall i thought you did an impressive job on this short but very powerful to me.. nice work!!!

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow, this was beautiful and colorful!! Love the flow, and it went full circle. Awesome words :)

B.A.

[Legion]

Oh, the wind doth covet....

I like this. Going in favorites. ;)

[Ralphy]

I love it, Sometimes I wonder how your inspirations finds those hidden voids...bringing splendor in just a few well placed words, and instant you have crafted a canvas, lively, and vibrant in colors...quite beautiful...bbr

[Fran Marie]

Quite lovely in poetic verse~ soft flowing and beautifully penned with

rich tones of vivid images~ Awesome piece indeed!!