affect

a few fragments of thought

 

The wind covets
silent whispers of
autumn’s dark
secret as her circle
stirs in delight…
slipping…
sliding…
through a labyrinth
of cool streams
cleansing Aphrodite’s
long, strands
of ebony
while eyes undress
me in blushing hues of

yesterday…

Reviews

[Charles]

I've been browsing through your work this morning and am delighted to have come across it. Each poem is a study in imagery and sensuality. Really great lines in each of the 4-5 I've read. This one has a slightly different form (nice to see how you slip from one form to another with quiet grace) but is no less effective for the short lines and more direct wording. The only 'flaw' that stood out here was 'silent whispers' - a redundency it seems. The line works as well without 'silence' because a whisper, after all, is still a whisper... shhhhh. :-)

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{this poems just flows so well-such a smooth read-i love it...}
"slipping…
sliding…
through a labyrinth
of cool streams
cleansing Aphrodite’s
long, strands
of ebony
while eyes undress
me in blushing hues of
yesterday…"
{God---Just Magnificent!!!}

james:-)

[The Viking]

This poem strikes almost a pagan or celtic scene into my mind. It seems like it's giving words to growing spiritual forces in October as Samhain approaches. That's where my mind took it anyway. The words stream along like water - smooth and sensual. There is definitely an element of love, lust, or both in the symbol of Aphrodite and the narrator undressed by wanting eyes. Loved it nonetheless. I love the secret places your poems take me.

[Wicahpi]

A beautiful portrait you have painted here in my visions.
Well done :)

[Michael X]

this poem is magical, and free flowing, beautiful work of art,
i second reading this 5 times, you capture the vision
with enchantment. and the reader cant help but fall spellbound. amazingly beautiful work apollonia.

[Alz Alz]

Very pretty... i especially loved "while eyes undress me in blushing hues of yesterday". It's got a wonderful calming flow :) i really enjoyed reading this poem. 100/100

[Jibey]

Has a pleasing feeling about it...as the eyes undress you in the cool Autumn breeze

[Ladysue]

A gentle flow and soft voice...very tranquil. Beautiful!

[Sorry Infamous]

Lovely poem, Lovely photo.

[emmajoy]

Tranquility descends .. time stills .. what a wonderful piece of writing .. it's a prayer, it's a devotion to what is all around ..

beautiful