Grain of Sand

sonnet VI

 

Summer lovers lost in a robe of light,

Thoughts found in a mermaid's hair,

Brightness ascending torrid thighs,

Two ripened hearts beyond compare,

Peculiar how folds the imagination,

When summer's blue view is banned,

An hourglass, our sweet vacation,

Dwindles to blank stones of land,

Ability never put together entirely,

We are no longer as the white whales,

But men dwelling in a moon so precise,

Venus amid a wreckage of rainbow shells;

     The tide must ebb and flow by rule and rule,

     And we disappear into the attic of the skull...

 

Reviews

[Von Halford]

Morning sky cloudy and gray,
Here am I, Must as the day,
Empty bed you're still on my mind,
Empty heart nothing defines how,
Lonely, Lonely since you left me,
Lonely since you left me,
Lonely since you left me here alone.


Your poem reminds me of that song. It's stuck in my head. Although I've never been able to figure out who sings it. Google doesn't bring up anything. Amazing poem though :)

[Fran Marie]

The tide must ebb and flow by rule and rule,

And we disappear into the attic of the skull...

I especially liked the ending couplet here~very nice

Beautiful and haunting sonnet~indeed, well crafted

in poetic expression, content and form~ Love it!!

[deeps]

Venus amid a wreckage of rainbow shells;

I loved this line, Amazing
This write is so wonderful,
I like this alot.