night visions

just a thought...

 

        The

      night

     struggles

     with

     illusions

    of

   drowning

  in

   a

    warm,

     turquoise

     sea...

    Tiny

   grains

    of

     sand

      float

       in

        front

       of

     eyes

   opened

  wide

  as

   we

    sink

     deeper...

      deeper...

 

    trapped...

 

  in clarity.

 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I'm reading a Stephen King ... and I came across a line -- as you do with him -- with a ring to it: 'sharp-edged clarity of thought'. I marked the page even. So I smiled when I saw where your sinuous poem was leading. Much in life is opaque and to the odd dash of clarity is absolutely refreshing. The 'warm tourquoise sea' has an allure about it. The images you conjour up, reinforced by the appealing shape of the poem, make the notion of drowing under such circumstances seem positively appealing. I actually felt underwater in a pleasant way as I read this poem. I wonder if there is some womb ativism in play here. On the other hand, people often talk of drowing in the cares of life and water is said to symbolise emotions. This is a dynamic poem, an enjoyable read. What a sting though, that the achieving clarity involves entrapment.

[Lady V]

Apollonia.................What is there to say about this piece? This is amazing and as always the picture you chose put a big red bow on it. Great piece.


Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

i llove the font, and the artisitic appeal of it. great short poem, bringts to mind many ideas, and also can be looked at in different angles. thanks for sharing.

[Holly]

I like the poem but I think the photo takes a way from the presence of the work itself

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I love it, its full of passion and tender at the same time :) Yossi

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Oh! This poem is beautiful!
Though it is written in a beautiful color but when you read then you will find that it actually have so many colors(meanings) . Any reader can have a different outlook towards this poem and I guess that is what makes this poem so special :)
The formating and the picture above is just perfect and enhanced the mood of the entire piece

A great read :)

[Pax Analog]

Love the gorgeous color coordination of the limpid line strands and the image.

And the strange paradox of being "trapped in clarity." I suppose this has to do with deliberately yielding to immersive emotions, while being clearly aware of the relative danger thereof.

Because of the emphasis on the water element, this also makes me curious about your astro-coordinates (I do astrological charts in a condensed poetic manner).

Again, the physical flow of the lines on the page is striking, like a mermaid's fin, and I love that the "tiny grains of sand" give the piece a dimension of being poignantly immersed in time and mortality, a subtler, more profound dimension to what is initially perceived relative to romantic feelings for another.

"Eternity is in love with the productions of time" wrote William Blake.

There is also a hint of jouissance, of pleasure in entrapment, a la bondage. So I read 3 primary layers into this elegant subaqueous rumination: romance/time and mortality/bondage. And yes, Orlando's noting of the womb suggestion is redolent too.

Excellent work with deceptively simple words, elements, image.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Wow! This poem has many meanings to it: Life, love, everyday activities, stressful situations, playful situations, emotions, melancholy emotions, and even a fear of many things. Im sure we experience every single one of these things. I know i do hehe. I agree with Orlando as well. It is a refreshing poem. This was very unique hun, great piece! Love the picture, too! :)

B.A.

[Legion]

I enjoyed it. Made me feel like floating in a warm sea off the coast of some place beautiful.