night visions

just a thought...

 

        The

      night

     struggles

     with

     illusions

    of

   drowning

  in

   a

    warm,

     turquoise

     sea...

    Tiny

   grains

    of

     sand

      float

       in

        front

       of

     eyes

   opened

  wide

  as

   we

    sink

     deeper...

      deeper...

 

    trapped...

 

  in clarity.

 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I'm reading a Stephen King ... and I came across a line -- as you do with him -- with a ring to it: 'sharp-edged clarity of thought'. I marked the page even. So I smiled when I saw where your sinuous poem was leading. Much in life is opaque and to the odd dash of clarity is absolutely refreshing. The 'warm tourquoise sea' has an allure about it. The images you conjour up, reinforced by the appealing shape of the poem, make the notion of drowing under such circumstances seem positively appealing. I actually felt underwater in a pleasant way as I read this poem. I wonder if there is some womb ativism in play here. On the other hand, people often talk of drowing in the cares of life and water is said to symbolise emotions. This is a dynamic poem, an enjoyable read. What a sting though, that the achieving clarity involves entrapment.

[Ladysue]

oh this is brilliant alright..trapped in clarity..WOW.. What a gorgeous flow and the images are so good..you captured it spot on!!! excellent...

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

Awesome ! I really liked this write.
I found it to flow very well and the expression of the words is simply wonderful.
This poem had the ability to paint a picture in my mind as I read!
simply put one word extraordinary!!
well done !
Lasla

[Crowley]

I really like your stuff.....nice work here, simple and deep.

[An owl on the moon]

You write with beautiful flow, thoughts meandering down the page, deeper into our minds and hearts. What a stunning, bittersweet, transcendent poem. Has me lost in thought now...

[deeps]

This is quite the beautiful write here.
I like your style and set up or words.
This is one wonderful write here.

[Fran Marie]

A lovely cascade od words softly flowing down, beautifully expressed

and well crafted in poetic verse ~ Superb pen my friend

[Sean M. Addams]

sometimes a thought can lead to a good thing... defintley in this case to a very impressive piece...the imagery is this is well done ..like the blue in this piece too adds a deep feel to it... overall a very brillant write..nice job!!

[Von Halford]

oooooooouuuuu. yes. I like this. It's a poem with a design. It taste like Drowning.

[Lexi Nicole]

Breathtaking. I love how you shaped the poem to look like water rolling in waves. This piece is simple yet it's that simplicity that proves your true poetic brilliance. There's emotion in it and it is just so true. Great work, I'm blown away.

-Howl

[SM Davis]

Trapped in clarity. Brilliant. Yes, I think there comes that moment ... when clarity happens and then there is no going back. No returning to blissful ignorance or unknowing. Very nicely done.