WOW an excellent outlet of the emotion released unto the poem. Indeed I can feel the anger,hurt,and weariness very vividly as a painting within my mind. The scars can be felt on the soul ..and their strength
to express them outwardly.The process has manifested unto the written expression another form of healing
I loved this poem, it expressed anger and hurt so vividly. And reminded me of past relationships and ex's who wanted to come back but i wasn't so sure.
You have a unique style that no else has here at the cafe, which makes all of your works all the more enjoyable. This is harshly emotional and the pain that exists within these words is evident. I was able to feel the emotion from this poem. This was definitely a therapeutic way of releasing the demons of this subject.
A brilliant poem which reeks of pain and indifference from one the most talented and artistic poets of our time!
Truly an awesome poem that has so much emotion and pain flowing from one's soul!
Again Apollonia, your excellent command of the english language has your readers totally captivated and makes them feel your pain and suffering in this piece.
Again an maginficient write from a very wonderful poet!
Keep writing from your soul for the good of all souls!
Hey, our relationships might never be perfect, but our memories and writings that will record it all in the logs of eternity can be!
Keep writing sweetie.
Keep doing such a splendid job as you always do!!!!
Bravo Bella, Bravo!
Always,
TIM
Well done, this sounds like the woman in, the garden, a story on my site, you are painting a picture that other can not deny seeing. I enjoyed this work.
Jan/Uisiom
'You burned our bed with indifference' is the strongest notion here for me. How true for how many millions is this? We all know of relationships that end in violence or adultery, but indifference is equally fatal. And, o what a pic you chose for this heartbreaker!
"Shameful...
Ungrateful...
Thieves and Liars
Reek of disease
Yellow wraps its cloak"
Now this is what I call AWESOME! I can highly relate myself with it, According to me it gives the feel of unfaithfulness from the second part at the time when you wanted him the most and since love is all about accepting someone for what they are and not for what they will be, So, it is obvious for you to have the same feel for him now when he wants you back...But you've already learned a lot from the past that now you can't again make the same mistake...So, after reading it I got that you are having that sense of emotions, I may be wrong...I don't know!
But I know one thing for sure that now you've moved on and that is the thing which matters most!
Great great great work as always!
It reminds me of a rape scene. Unfortunately and fortunately I had the honor of listening to the stories of many foster kids my grandparents raised. I have learn a lot of horror, but I have also gained a lot of wisdom. This captures that in my eye, love this poem. Very well done. I truly think this one is a masterpiece deeper in the minds of those who are lost and broken.
"Why weren't you there
When I needed you?
Why did I allow you...
To Spare me the Time?"
Ouch. Painful words.... especially
"why did I allow you?".... that hits
home in a big way. The bottom line
really...
why do we allow anything less than what
we want?
I like the flow of this piece -- it builds up to
the ending well. The last line is
excellent. I have a thing about
endings... personally, I find they are what
captures the poem... or leaves it unfinished.
Your's is perfect.