Angelic Vengeance

Imaginative rant about the importance of writer's etiquette. Grudges and personal feelings have no place in the rating system.

Seldom brazen

Uses silver-tongue dagger

Etiquette a facade

Rating becomes diabolical plot

 

Contrived of jealousy

 

She preaches the word of God

'Do as I say or else'

Stifles creativity

Of imagination

 

Imperial judge of sorts

 

She's here she's gone

She's here she's gone

She's here she's gone

She's here she's gone

 

 I'm the one with the problem?

 

Ultimate train wreck

Waiting to happen

Cruel intentions

Light years from divine

 

Self-proclaimed therapist

 

Corrupt reviewer

Clothed in white

Appears to be...

Seems to Be...

 

A devout follower of God

 

Don't speak to her man!

Stay away

Or she'll deep fry your tongue

You'll be the entree at her feast

 

Just after she arrives home...

 

FROM CHURCH.

 

 

 

Author's Note

All of us are entitled to our own styles, feelings and techniques. But to go to another's piece and abuse the rating system is inexcusable. Sorry folks, don't mean to preach....

Reviews

[Lalli]

lmao!!! preach on sista tell these people whats up, we are a community damnit!

i like your experimenting with ne styles.

an awareness poem of hypocrisy. "cruel intentions, light years from divine" love it.

as a person who has grown up in the church.. I have to say there are way to many who are quick to condemn, but not to hold their tongues.

Seriosuly though off the religious topic, and onto the artists criticizing as if their sh*t don't stink. Artist need to support, encourage and learn from each other.. not belittle, and tear down. Tell 'em.. because all these people who seem to think that we are to tell them how to write their poetry, their stories, honestly.. then it wouldn't be mine.. suggestions are accepted, and postive criticsm always welcome, but down right commands are as best said, inexcusable!

much love n' respect

-Lalli

[An owl on the moon]

How did I miss this one! And oh my... a biting, gripping write indeed! Your style just pounds in the imagery, yet the message of grace is read between the lines... Yes.. Such hateful thoughts and feelings should be kept to oneself... Powerful to say the least!

[Brette Medb]

This is different and I loved it. It was stinging and had it's own unique undertones. I liked the ending, holding everything back and then letting it out when she gets home but waiting till after church. Nice write.


Brette

[Mark D. Chevalier]

Couldn't agree more! You go girl!

I think if someone wants to be constructive that's one thing. But I've seen from time to time where it becomes malicious. And that to me smacks of someone who doesn't have the chops to stand on thier talent, and can only feel better about themselves by tearing someone else down.

Nicely done!
Mark

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

Indeed well written BRAVO love the style of this also nice experiment!

"Ultimate train wreck

Waiting to happen

Cruel intentions

Light years from divine"

I love these lines as i despise hypocrisy !!!!!
An excellent write again my friend!

B.B.
Lasla

[Mr. Misanthrope]

This poem is drowning in originality! And yes, I completely agree with you on how everyone is entitled to use thier own styles in writing.

-Luke

[Periac]

love this piece loved the ending....i follow this piece as it hits home to me...i write some pieces that can be "bad taste" and agree with your lament....loved it !!

[A.J. Smith]

Very witty...you write well when you're riled up! :) (You write well anyway.) Seriously, though, you're spot on...I've had encounters with some rude folks in this cafe. Thankfully, most of my encounters have been terrific, though.

[Rylan Batten]

Hey, I like your writing a lot and really enjoy it, and I also understand your frustration. However, it's hard to sympathize with someone criticizing these writerscafe quarrels when, at the same time, they're posting things that will just add tender to the fire....

Guess I'm just saying that people seem incredibly two-dimensional through the internet, and so to attack them personally based on how they seem hypocritical in an area may lead to an uninformed, but always unnecessary, escalation. I understand why you're angry, I really really really do, but I just hate to see you falter in turning out your excellent writing--even for a moment--in order to write something like above.

All of this said with the utmost respect for your true talent,

Rylan

[Jessica Fox]

This was another great poem, I loved the preach preach on!! Although I do get pissed when people ask for honest reviews and when you give them they whine and say helpful not hurtful.