still

still

A Poem by TamiViolet
"

remaining strong during difficult times...

"

 

Sometimes I wish that I were cold like tonight, falling on the ice wouldn't hurt

so much, and the purple on my slender thighs would transform to yellow.

 

I would no longer find comfort wearing your old football jersey, number

thirteen slowly fading as the minutes become hours and the days intermingle

with the nights...

 

Loving you made me stronger.

 

Sacrifices are mute if for only one moment I feel your lips upon mine and the

warmth of your tongue as it explores the safety of my breasts.

 

I always perceived myself as fragile, but now realize that I am as the sea, for on
the stormiest of nights the black waves concede when the attempt to drown me

becomes...

 

Insurmountable.

 

I am yet standing on the shimmering white sand as it tickles my feet; the sun
caresses my shoulders, and the summer breeze restores my freedom, for I know
that I possess the ability...

 

to Love...

 

in spite of chaos.

© 2008 TamiViolet


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"I am yet standing on the shimmering white sand as it tickles my feet; the sun
caresses my shoulders, and the summer breeze restores my freedom, for I know
that I possess the ability...

to Love...

in spite of chaos."

This says it all. Everything that will ever mean anything....
Beautifully done! Yes indeed....

A favorite of mine, thank you!



Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.




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'The safety of my breasts' - beautiful line. This is a stunning poem. Well penned and delightful to read this morning. Thank you for sharing such depth.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

"Loving you made me stronger."

Wow!! This is like so beautifully awesome...Very deep and intense piece of writing and so emotional indeed!
I simply loved it....Each and minute detail and the way you gave it a new beauty with your words ...that's really very impressive..
Also, the first pic is really very very beautiful..!!

'to Love...

in spite of chaos."

Yes! That is what Love and thus Life is all about :)
Amazing piece of writing!

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

The words are orchestrated perfectly and deliver this message beautifully. I especially like the picture of the rainbow reflecting off the waves as it too shows beauty surrounded by the chaos. I enjoyed reading it and like the conclusions� I possess the ability...to Love...in spite of chaos. Nicely done.


Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is very beautiful. Thank you for sharing. You sound very strong through this time. Know the sun will come up tomorrow. Keep your spirits up. Learning to love is never easy, but it can be so satisfying that you actually let yourself grow with another, which helps you grow as an individual.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written. Yes, fragile like an egg, but strong like one too. Try to break one by squeezing it in the palm of one hand. Hope your difficult times pass soon. :( Wishing the best for you.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

the wording is elegant, the imagery exquisite, and the visual aids you used add a lot to an already powerful piece. I really enjoyed this, the idea, the portrayal of that idea--it was all very well done. Keep it up!

--Rylan


Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

pretty work of self discovery......

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Loving you made me stronger.

True love does make one stronger and a better person. You have presented this phenomenon in such a brilliant manner.

old football jersey, your lips upon mine, the black waves
I love the details here. It adds so much of life to this piece.

Great writing.



Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

A very profound and intimate write. You digged into your soul and opened yourself up for us to have a look inside your internal turmoil of feelings and questions about your existence.

A strong and under the skin creeping piece!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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