A silent whimper

just random thoughts

Whisking in this closet,

Away from the crowded world,

In the dusk of dreaded dreams,

My soul yells, it screams,

When I look in the mirror,

I see a giant taking his last breaths,

Waiting to be set free from the chains of sordidness,

Fighting with the debris of dreams left behind,

Tired of building a new castle to survive,

Destroyed, depleted, shattered,

Surviving is nothing more than a miracle,

The wind that I thought would give a new meaning,

Turned out to be nothing but a poisonous air,

It is killing me every second,

With each passing breath as I loose control,

I see the life getting over,

It was promising once,

But now its dying with a silent whimper.

Author's Note

criticism welcomed

Reviews

[jesserose99]

this has great depth, what you see in the mirror is very interesting to me. a giant building his castle. I see life as something of a struggle that goes more and more every day. you being out of place in a land with not enough air for your size. I love the analogy. anyway, nice write!!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Thank you so much for the kind words....the beauty of life is that it is uncertain.. how often we feel out of place and suddenly it changes....

[sansrity sinha]

great choice of words. truly describes situation as well as perception today..

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Thank you so much for the kind review :)

[Sami Khalil]

Sometimes we feel that it is hard to survive, to witness miracles or get rid of those dreaded dreams. We should focus on the positive and work for better days and chances. An excellent write...:)........

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Thank you so much Sir for the kind words...yah as rightly said by you, surviving sometimes needs miracle.....

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:).................

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done. But life must be lived to survive. Never give up. There is always a chance for sunshine tomorrow.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Thank you Sir for the kind words... it gets difficult but surely never impossible to survive :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, devastating words...just a giving up in spirit...no longer a will to fight on...

in the one line..."by breath as i lose control"

yes, sometimes it feels like surviving is a miracle.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Thank you Sir for the kind review... yes how many times we face such situations in life yet we continue to live to fight another day....