Lonely

Standing in a crowd, 
yet you feel alone. 
Sitting in an empty room,
yet you feel alone. 

This pain in my chest, 
At night is when I feel the most. 
Maybe it's an episode
Maybe it's because I received a message, 
a message that took me back when.
Maybe it's both. 

I am buried in broken dreams.

The other side of those dreams,
Possess a chilling tone
The unknown, once welcoming...
Dreaded now. 

You're standing in a crowd, yet, 
You still feel alone. 
You're sitting in an empty room,
Feeling all alone. 

We are buried in broken dreams. 
is there a way out? 
Will I ever find the way out, 
Out of this bleakness. 

I will find a way out. 

Reviews

[Hallow]

Beautiful work. I love that the main focus is loneliness itself. How it really does seem to consume every part of you. The hopeful note at the end was pleasant. A light in the dark.

[Twilight]

I like how this ends, with a positive and determined statement of intent; which could allow you a route out of the vicious cycle of despair - in which you claim to be trapped. It seems as if, both broken dreams and loneliness; have taken hold in your life. I noticed how you emphasised, that a crowded environment can sometimes feel as lonely as an empty room. And, how the unknown - can either be something which we dread; or perceived as an opportunity. This poem speaks of more too, and I can tell that you have thought carefully about the words.

[Antifranticbabydoll]

Written in the middle of the night, provided by Mania.
Thank you. -M

[Samuel Dickens]

The last line is encouraging. There was a five year period in which I felt the way you describe. The despair will never end, you think, but it will and it does. You do a great job of expressing your loneliness in words.

[Antifranticbabydoll]

Thank you. -M

[Franky]

I feel this at times. Very well written and summarized. Loneliness is very real. And sad too.

[Antifranticbabydoll]

Thank you for your review. :) --M

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this loneliness i get. in fact, i felt it most of my life. at school i was an outcast. university, i tried a bit more socialising, it worked a bit but still i felt like i didn't belong. and after that, i tried fitting in again but that lonely emotion never left. yet, the way this poem ends gives me a bit of hope for finding my kindred spirit. if you aren't going to give up hope, neither will i.

[Antifranticbabydoll]

There are moments where I declare brokenness forever, but those are just moments and there's a bigger picture at play. I can't future trip, I can't stay in the past...The present is all we have, and we have to make the most of it. Even if the moment sucks.
Thank you for your review, as always --M

[emmajoygreen]

Such a sadness here - near enough a trap. Your words show both desperation and honesty. Whether writing out your pain will be that over-used word 'cathartic', don't know. But, here's sincerely hoping you can find a hand to hold, a friend, a place, an inspiration to help you sooner than soon

[Antifranticbabydoll]

Thank you for your review :)

[maya_online]

You know I love a good poem which uses repeating schemes (lol I use it in almost all of my work), so I love this piece, that it starts off on a bleak tone, but leads to something more hopeful at the end!

[Antifranticbabydoll]

Thank you :)