Coder's anxiety

Coder's anxiety

A Poem by Happy hours
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Dedicated to all programmers out there

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I'm gawking at computer, looking for a bug in code
my eyes are bloating, I'm trying hard to decode


also trying to decode, what this grumpy manager want from me?
my coherence or my omission 




He is accountable for my appraisal in the end of year
I need to be indefatigable on the road
I'm gawking at computer, looking for a bug in code

I'm master in .net still I'm working on database
life is a game and this is a frozen phase




daily I'm listening stony tough word from client
I'm too bijou but the project is giant




Apart from that manager assigned me daily task 
Is he really concerned for me or just wearing a mask?



I call my dad and told him about my plight
he replied "I'm a manager under some senior managers, right?"






I got him and now I'm trying  even harder to find a bug in the code
this time to concrete my future road

© 2014 Happy hours


Author's Note

Happy hours
just a rough work...want to write something else on the same topic..but finally i end up with this...please correct me

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Really nice work, shows creative mind and imagination, and it`s funny...I like the nice comics-like style, and the pictures! Always with humor and feeling of reality..Working place is such a mess :)

:: nia ::

Posted 9 Years Ago


Happy hours

9 Years Ago

thank you for the valuable review :)
Daily vexation comically laid out..Enjoyed it:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Happy hours

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot dear friend :)
I like this. It's a humorous take on a challenge in your life. As a reader I get to laugh at you for a bit instead of worrying about my own life. That second picture cracks me up. I love the creativity you used. It actually makes it simpler, like a children's book. It's easy to follow and not tiring to read. I don't know anything about coding, but this poem shows how programmers are regular people with everyday problems, trying to get a job done.

The only things I could think of to criticize are the grammar and structure.
The grammar could use some work, but maybe it's not necessary to change it. It adds character.
Something that might add a little more structure or fluidity to this piece is more use of that line "I'm gawking at computer, looking for a bug in code"
I would even change it up with each use. Say something like "I'm gawking at computer, trying harder still to find a bug in code" then "I'm gawking at computer, eyes straining to find a bug in code" and then after you say the project is giant it could be "I'm gawking at computer, tired of looking for a bug in code"
Those are just some ideas.
I love the way you took a somewhat monotonous aspect of your life and used it to spark some creativity. You show the reader coping skills and how to focus on the future when the present gets tedious.
Great job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Happy hours

9 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words and suggestion.It really help me a lot...I'm glad that you like my poe.. read more
Lizzie Mitchell

9 Years Ago

You're welcome
A very enjoyable read. Bravo...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Happy hours

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot sir :)
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:).....
This could not only be connected with work but also with life.
I especially like the pictures and the text change. Made it more interesting to read!
The one about the manager, is so true. People are double faced. They all maybe wearing a mask, we dont know.
Keep writing! nice job :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


Happy hours

9 Years Ago

thanks a ton for the valuable review :)

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