Breathe Darling

Downpour of heartache...

Broken Chains bonded and Devine 

Two souls intertwined

Somehow linked so tight

Am I suffocating you?

More than any dream I've dreamt 

Breathe, Darling.. 

While you still can 

Remain stationary in the wind 

Hide in the eye of the hurricane 

Sweet lover, 

Dearest friend... 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

You write really good...Bravo...........................

[Frieda P]

Nice sentiments here, 'hide in the eye of the hurricane', great line.

I think you meant 'divine'.........

[Alanna Nox]

I did mean divine, it was a typo, haha. (: But thank you!

~Nox

[Frieda P]

Quick fix, it's a shame to ruin such a pretty write with a typo, I hate when that happens to me too...My pleasure! :-)

[Sean Peyres]

Definitely my favorite! Such a great poem! Quick and short, yet your use of words show so much emotion and thought into writing this piece :) it truly is amazing. Keep it up!

[Alanna Nox]

Thank you so much! :)

~Nox

[Karen]

Beautiful poem! I love the short, succinct lines, each with vivid imagery. I was taken aback by the question, "Am I suffocating you?" I'm not sure why, as if I too am burdened by that question when it comes to friends and lovers, a nagging self-conscious reminder to myself. Great poem!

[Alanna Nox]

Thank you! I'm glad you were able to see that in this piece:)

[Pryde Foltz]

Love, especially new love, is so fragile. What is too much and what is too little. Fantastic job of brining this to poetic terms.

[Alanna Nox]

Thank you! :)

~Nox

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Sweet poem and such a lovely picture to complement it. :) I just would like to ask if you purposely spelled "Devine"? Or is it "Divine"?

[Alanna Nox]

Haha no it was meant to be Divine, it was a typo :3

[MsJewel]

Wow...I can't believe you are only 13 years old. The depth of your writing is that of a seasoned poet. Keep writing. You have a beautiful talent.

:) Julie

[Alanna Nox]

Thank you very much :)
~Nox