Ransomed Love

Your love cannot leave if I lock the door/

Holding it captive/ 

The ransom a promise/

I'm a lost cause/

Together we can flee/

I'm ill, your my remedy/

You say bitter, I say sweet/

Hush now...

All is well 

Author's Note

I know this isn't a great poem, but I'm trying! :)

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

"You say bitter, I say sweet." Opposites do attract, no doubt of that, is there? A love held captive, though, is not one that will last. It will find a way to seep through the cracks. Good expression of emotion in this one. Welcome to the cafe. Lydi**

[Pryde Foltz]

I'm ill, your my remedy/
You say bitter, I say sweet/
Hush now...
All is well

If only, right. Your poem had a wonderful wry nature to it, that made it both humorous and touching.

[William J. Marsh]

There is everything great here, more than anyone could wand in a complex thought. Sometimes love feels this way.

[Alanna Nox]

Thank you all so much! I'm really taking in all the feedback, it's exactly what I was looking for! :)
~Nox

[Distantview123]

An interesting write. Love takes two to make it work. Sometimes one party works harder than the other, and maybe in such circumstances it can seem like love is being held to ransom. Unfortunately, such a love will flounder in time, I believe. Nicely penned. ~ Robert.

[Lisa Victoria]

Your thoughts here fly off the page to reveal the desperation of trying to hold onto that one love that can never be ours to keep...very nicely penned:) Welcome to the cafe....

Lisa:)

[Heather]

i love this its short and sweet and also very meaningful keep it up! and welcome to writers cafe!! :)