The Darkness beckons to me with a desire to comsume me. I am tempted by it, to lead a life of solitude, escape this world of lies.
There is but one person that could lead me away from the darkness but they don't care about me so why should they. They are happy in their life, untempted by the darkness.
No one knows about my secret darkness and every day it seems more and more comforting. Being able to keep away from the people that annoy me so. Hide in my head where nothing can get to me. The darkness is so tempting.
I've decied that I'm going to let the darkness consume me. Never again will anyone be able to reach me, save for one. They do not and will not ever know of the darkness that consumes me.
Okay, all of you that give me reviews seem to be under the pretense that this "poem" is true. I have been tempted by "the darkness" and that is how I felt at the time but then I stopped and thought about it and my life is fine so I have never "entered into the darkness." I just wanted to clear that up.
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Soemtimes thats the best thing for all of us, solitude from mankind. Alienation from the world has the ability to be a beautiful thing. Surround yourself with things in your life that make you happy and you may enter this solitude, your escape with a happier nature. Your comments on darkness are written well in the are of specific needs, and yet they are vague, which allows the reader, your audience to relate to to your writing alot easier than you think. I wish you the best of luck in your future writing.
-N. James Frazier
Darkness is tempting but you had already let go of your light. If the darkness gets to your inner most feelings inside your heart it will turn you evil, darkness, a powerful word :) Chase your light, never let it go, it will be the only thing that will keep you sane.
This is a very sad poem. Many people think this about the darkness at one time or another and few have the guts to reveal the sadness they endured once the cloud passed. *hugs*
I like it. I think all that you experience in the darkness and not will contribute to you as a person and therefore yourself on the page. Always be true to what you have experienced. It may suck, and you may wish it didn't teach you something, but it did.
This poem form seems to be more free, so in this case i would change this sentence:
I am tempted by it, to lead a life of solitude, escape this world of lies.
to: I am tempted by it, to lead a life of solitude and escape this world of lies.
Soemtimes thats the best thing for all of us, solitude from mankind. Alienation from the world has the ability to be a beautiful thing. Surround yourself with things in your life that make you happy and you may enter this solitude, your escape with a happier nature. Your comments on darkness are written well in the are of specific needs, and yet they are vague, which allows the reader, your audience to relate to to your writing alot easier than you think. I wish you the best of luck in your future writing.
-N. James Frazier
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