Anon from the East

Try to tell me what I wrote. This doesn't rhyme, so if you like those... I guess go somewhere else?

Joining others of great and high "Talent",

Makes one feel they are the same,

But reality strikes those shards of truth,

As they leave these imprints in the mind.

One's "Talent" is born within the core,

Can be learned, can be destroyed,

With the need to fit this act on stage, 

It shatters with the jeers of goals and gain.

"Talent" I show, Expectations they grow,

Creating a barrier between true and false,

Wonder I will, Wonder I won't,

When this silent pierrot will have its last laugh.

Author's Note

Tell me what I need to here. It'll help fuel my inner core

Reviews

[Threads]

Well what you need to hear is I liked this poem!
'One's "Talent" is born within the core, // Can be learned, can be destroyed, // With the need to fit this act on stage,'
I feel those lines really summarize the anxious need to fit in for a new member of a group.
Alright then for the critique portion ;)
There were two parts that caught my eye, in which the pacing forced me to re-read them over and over again. The portion I quoted is clearly linked together, while the last line of the stanza "It shatters with the jeers of goals and gain" clearly relates to the previous notion of "Talent". See if you can somehow use structuring to pick it apart from the rest of the stanza.
Similarly the final stanza is clearly cut into two portions that seem to have little in common.

But hey, that's just my review of the poem. I really enjoyed it, and think that it could be all the better with those parts fixed.
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[Jun Kurt Tanaro]

First of all, I would like to thank you for reading this poem I made. For that I am thankful(being redundant but you get the gist). I'm surprised and saddened that that portion was noticed immediately. To tell you honestly, this poem is divided in three portions, but I decided to place all those with the word "Talent" into one poem to see how far it'll go. I'll take your critique as advise and try to be better. m(_ _)m

[Threads]

It in no way feels out of place, but for the sake of pacing the lines could somehow be separated. Think of visual poetry, in the sense that you could simply add some space to the start of the line.
Like so:
....line....
....line....
. ....line....
....line....
Or a simple use of parenthesis.
....line....
....line....
(....line....)
....line....
This highlights the line, while also separating it from the rest.
Just tips and tricks you catch on to with time. :)
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