Lost.

Green. That was all she saw.
Anywhere she looked. Her hair was
a a tangled mess. Her dress ripped
and muddy. Running through the
dense forest, her lungs ached. She
wanted to stop, to catch her breath,
even if only for a moment, buy she
knew she couldn't. They were hot
on her trail. Their footsteps getting
louder and louder. Her feet were
bruised and bloody. The rough
ground was having no mercy on
her.
'Faster. Faster!' she told herself, as
if those words had the power to
increase her acceleration. Heavy
breaths, another cut, another way
of pain washing over her, but she
kept on running. Stopping now
meant the end. She didn't want to
die. Not in the hands of those sick
cannibals. She had not the slightest
idea where she was headed but she
had a tiny hope that she would
survive. She would get away. And
that tiny hope was enough fuel to
keep her going.
As if the universe just loved to
mess with her, she tripped on a
thick vine, gasping in pain as she
fell. The constant crunching of the
previously fallen dried leaves made
her fully aware of how close her
predators were. She shut her eyes
as she felt them hover over her and
screamed at the top of her lungs.
She woke up with a gasp. She pulled
her self up wiping the sweat that
poured down the side of her face
as she frantically looked around for
any potential harm. Relief washed
over her as she wiped off her tears.
'Just a dream.' She told her self,
'Just a terrible dream'.
After breathing deeply for a while to
calm her stammering heart, she laid
down back on her bed and silently
vowed to herself never to watch
any bloody horror movie before
bedtime. Ever.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism will be appreciated. I really need to know what I lack and how I can improve myself.

Reviews

[Zeph]

Interesting disposition, at first glance I thought it was a poem XD

Overall I think it's a great piece of writing with an unexpected ending that had me stop and think for a moment :)
The only error I could find was " her self" should be "herself" and "wiped off her tears" should be "wiped away her tears" , other than that, brilliant story, keep up the good work :)

[Annica]

Thankyou :) I'll make sure not to make that mistake again :p