Pulse

Dull purple light baths

everyone in the room

casting a spell on my eyes

we look like fallen angels

or risen sinners.

 

Music pulses in my chest

bringing me closer to tears

with every moaning bass that plays

my heart shatters a little more.

 

My eyes are sluggish

as I see cigarette smoke

rising over your head

clouding everything but your charm

past sins almost forgiven.

 

but not quite...

 

Feeling the way my tongue

disconnects from my thoughts

as I move closer to you

makes my head scream stop!!

 

Have a little self preservation...

 

When my lips brush yours I tell you

that I am better than she will ever be,

that you will regret losing me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

"When my lips brush yours I tell you

that I am better than she will ever be,

that you will regret losing me."

Goodness, I know now what you mean when you say you and I are alike. I feel you. You, too, are truely an amazing writer. I enjoyed reading this. Know I'm always here to empathize with you. (:

[zainul]

Very well penned.
I doubt her wonderful words,"that you will regret losing me"
will finally captivate the male.
There may be many more temptations to allure him!

[Marquise]

this poem is very good.. i hope it does well!!

[Kimberly_ eternal dream..]

it's too good!!
oh u realy giv a good ending to ur poems!!
very wel expres'd!!

-eternal kim

[Lee E. Powell]

Awesome! The ending was great. I loved how confident she was at the end

[Vanessa]

I found that I could relate to this greatly.
I love when things are personal, because I think of the times that I sit at my computer,
typing away at whatever feeling needs to get out or be destroyed. I also find
that relating is much easier when things are personal. That's what I liked so much about this.

Thanks for sharing this with all : )

--Vanessa Alyse

[Staci Brown]

very kewl write hon... loved the imagery as it created your setting.... brought me back to my youth in a flash!

loved how the girl in your poem struggles with her feelings but stops herself from going too far again, and the confidence she has at the end... great job!

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)