True Success

It is not
to where we've been -
it's to where we are going
not lost in
this endless spin,
but, one direction, growing

Now, take the truth,
like vitamins -
and be content in knowing
Love gives you your
best chance to win -
your best, you best be showing

Spend time with
life worth living -
try to make real progress
spend less time
doing sin now -
later, less to confess

I hope you've heard
these thoughts I've said -
with words, hope I impress
pray Heaven's Gate
opens for you -
your life is a success

Reviews

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

well written and positive write

[Mary Bosworth]

You have captured deep emotion and done it with a great form of poetry that flows and melts us

[Aprille]

"It is not
to where we've been -
it's to where we are going"
As long as we keep on moving forward, we would eventually get to the place we've always dreamed of, the true success.

[Celestial Witch Child]

Your rhyme scheme is flawless. I'm a bit jealous. Haha. Very nice work. (:

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the gentle tone and wisdom in the poem. Last lines should be the dreams of the all of us. Finding peace and calm at the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Blake Fodor]

This is a very enjoyable scene you depicted in words

[Mary C]

glad I took the time to read this piece. You have a great way with words and a great writer is born of that

[Tai Ryens]

Marvelous advice given here: that true success is simply knowing that you're happy. Well done.

[John Anderson]

A unique and beautifully expressed poem. This is very nicely written

[Susan Beth Horvath]

Your poem is deep and well presented. Gets your readers to think