Unguarded

Another in my response series

unguarded, resented
too rampant for panting
won’t play the game
not today, not ever
single-minded
reminded of a wild stallion
a mare if you dare
where you least expect

directed, never deflected
from purpose
a porpoise trying to fly
defying gravity
no friend to depravity
(but familiar)
higher, close to the sun

kin to the moon
born in June
twin goddesses
(wearing bodices?)
checking indices
for the right time

a reunion
a collision
(some might say)
of wills, cheap thrills
(others insist)
they can’t resist

playing the voyeur
right in the foyer
for shame
(who can blame them)
when the sparks fly
so do we

Author's Note

For those who have been following me lately, this is not AI. This is my response to an AI poem.

Reviews

[Ballpark Frank]

This is fun to read. 🙂

This sounds clever and imaginative. A little attitude is displayed too which is cool. I'm
Only imagining what it's talking about and that's ok since my imagination takes me to odd, weird, cool places all the time.

[Anne Martin]

Related to Our Separate Ways, but earlier in the relationship, before bad things start.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like the dance of thoughts dear Anna.
"a reunion
a collision
(some might say)
of wills, cheap thrills
(others insist)
they can’t resist"
The above lines. I liked. Good to run freely in the desire of passion. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Twilight]

This is nice, and playfully hinting at the erotic. The word play is pretty inventive, and juxtapositions used between some lines.

It rhymes in places. The lines which rhyme, seem to do so in a way; which helps to place emphasis on certain words or end words within the verses. Or, am I imagining that?

[Anne Martin]

Yes, some flagrant (or fragrant) rhymes here. Just wrote what came naturally to me.

[Twilight]

Yes, I get that. By not overthinking everything, it allows you to write ✍️"in the raw"; so to speak.! So, I can appreciate a slightly better reflection of the real you..? Equally, I know that you can and do - painstakingly polish your work - as and when you see fit (particularly when a commercial piece no doubt).

[Anne Martin]

I don't know what to do with these response poems. They seem (to me) incomplete without the poem they are responding to (the AI generated one). I don't want to post AI here anymore. People get the wrong idea about me.

The responses are more in the raw than usual, since I don't have time to massage them.

[Twilight]

Yes. As you're so honest, you prefer to make clear when you have used AI. But, so many just disregard that.

Also, people who happen to dislike AI material anyway; will general jump to other conclusions. You know. Sometimes, slurs about lacking integrity etc; without realising - how genuinely versatile and capable you really are.

I am sorry for the few harsh comments which I made in the past, in regard to AI usage. But, trust you know I appreciate your output in general terms.

To be honest, I was also a bit genuinely worried for you; that you might end up disappointed with AI. Or, abandon your other ways of writing. I just wanted to say sorry visibly, rather than by direct message - so my apology is open for others to see. Sorry again, Anne.

[Anne Martin]

No problem, Julian