I Miss You

a poem of how miss someone. It can basically be anybody.

You've been gone for awhile and I haven't got a chance to give you a hug or a simple 

smile.

It makes my heart empty when you're not by my side, you're busy, you're well

but have you notice that  I miss you? I know words cannot tell.

When will you come back? I'm worried about you and you're life

Have send you a long letter, but yet you haven't replied. 

I know you will, but I am so impatient as to 'when?'

I'm even looking at my phone, at least waiting for a call and all I see is a blank screen.

To me it's been like years, to you? well I'm not sure what's in your head.

All I can do is just cry and accept the pain. How could you leave when I needed you?

When all we talked about was the dreams that is now in the drain.

So you're faraway and am lonely which I had never expect 

Now I feel cold and being neglected. I feel like killing myself so then you would understand

but I know it's just useless, because you wont be there to give a hand

I miss you and I'm still holding on, someday you will, I don't care how long.

Author's Note

what you think of the way I wrote this poem?
any grammar correction?

Reviews

[Celestial Witch Child]

Such great emotion. Perhaps put a comma between "someday you will" and "I don't care how long" in the last line. It would make it more coherent. Other than that, I loved it. The anxiety of a response is such a relatable experience. I'm looking forward to seeing more poetry.

[Annie S]

thank you :) keep that in mind

[GunMetal]

In the first line awhile should be a while because you use it as a noun. I was irked by your use of "got" but then I looked it up and apparently "gotten" isn't really used in the UK so I don't know, I guess it's none of my business :P
In this line: "I'm worried about you and you're life" - you're should be your.
And yes, send should be sent
I suggest changing "but yet you haven't replied." I would either change but to and, or write it like this, "but you haven't yet replied."
"To me it's been like years, to you? well-" That comma should be a period and "well" should be capitalized. I would also recommend changing it's been to it feels.
In "All I can do is just cry" you don't need the word "just" in there because "All I can do" already says it, and adding "just" makes it redundant.
In "When all we talked about was the dreams that is now in the drain." was should be were, and is should be are.
"Expect" should be "expected".
In "cold and being neglected", there's no need for "being" to be in there.
"I feel like killing myself" Don't do that! It never ends well.

The feel of this writing is very simple, and jumps between moods rather jarringly. Though we can all relate to the feeling of missing someone. It's a helpless and arduous feeling, but don't give up on hope. Keep writing.

[afra]

i relate a lot with this poem ....... keep writing

[Edmund S. Obumba]

well..just some little problem on the tenses like you should've said 'sent' instead of send..but altogether its a very soulful piece..when I was reading this I felt like I was the one the letter was addressed to..I almozst wrote a reply!you actually know how to bring the emotions in the reader to merge with yours...in a simple but sweet manner.I like it;-)..

[Annie S]

ugh i know it's the tenses. :( Well i am learning anyway thank you