Creature

You're the creature in my dream

clawing at my lost thoughts 

Trying to push me down

down to the center of the earth where only

You hold me down dark shadows mourn 

But I stand up

I push you away

I fight today

Sav~

Author's Note

Let me know how you interpret this, Thanks for reading~

Reviews

[Jamestown]

I would take this as a secret that haunts you from the inside out, everyone
has secrets but some worse then others. Great piece, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Savanna]

Thanks for reviewing, and yes its something like that., you too :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Short but really meaningful.
Its a very strong piece, you have strength, a strength I don't have when it comes to the darkness.
I admire you for that.
This was deep, meaningful, powerful, and inspiring.
Keep writing :)

[Savanna]

Thank you for reading it means a lot, :) Stay strong even if its hard.
:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your welcome :)
and thank you. i will try :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Wow this is really nice how you stopped that demon from trying to take advantage of you.

[Savanna]

thanks for reading, :) glad you like it.

[Thoren]

My stab at how I interpret this:
You are haunted by thoughts you are trying to forget, but they will not go away.
You must force yourself to forget. Con

[Savanna]

thanks for the review. I like your interpretation.

[John Ryan]

this reminds me of my poem the gray. i like the length and flow.

i love the way that the narrator overcame his/her adversity.

really well done

[Savanna]

Thank you :D I'll check out your poem

[Savanna]

Oh i already did :3 lol

[Demii]

I liked this poem, good flow, short and detailed, and I liked the twist :)

[Savanna]

Thanks for the review :)

[Desiree B.]

To me, the monster you described sounded like someone's inner turmoil (i.e. depression or regret). But the two last lines restore hope, where that person finally shrugs off the depression and continues on for the sake of living (one day at a time).

[Savanna]

That's exactly what i was trying to describe. Thank you for the Review :)

[Desiree B.]

No problem! :)

[EdgarLovecraft]

I thought the poem was great. Nice twist saving the rhyme till the end of the poem.

[Savanna]

Thanks for reviewing :)