Paper-thin Promises

Paper-thin promises...
Words written on a paper, easily torn apart
And then you had to go and break my heart

Paper-thin promises...
Words that wash away in the rain
I knew it was my loss and your gain

Paper-thin promises...
 Words that can easily be erased
 You didn't even tell me who you are
 Or even show me your face

Paper-thin promises...
Words that fade away with time
Your promises left me aimless with no reason or rhyme.

Reviews

[Blue]

I like the concept of "paper-thin promises.' Original and fresh. The last stanza struck me the most but I think you mean, "your promises left me aimless." Also in "easily be torn apart," you may want to omit "be."

"aimless with no reason or rhyme" is beautiful.

[Anita Singh]

Thank you for catching hold of the mistakes. I have made the corrections. Thanks again for reading my work, Blue! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

The title belies the depth of this truly wonderful poem. So young to have so much wisdom.

[Anita Singh]

Oh!! thank you so much, Goode. Guess mistakes make us wiser.

[Aru Bansal]

What a great poem, ma'am.