Paper-thin Promises

Paper-thin promises...
Words written on a paper, easily torn apart
And then you had to go and break my heart

Paper-thin promises...
Words that wash away in the rain
I knew it was my loss and your gain

Paper-thin promises...
 Words that can easily be erased
 You didn't even tell me who you are
 Or even show me your face

Paper-thin promises...
Words that fade away with time
Your promises left me aimless with no reason or rhyme.

Reviews

[Blue]

I like the concept of "paper-thin promises.' Original and fresh. The last stanza struck me the most but I think you mean, "your promises left me aimless." Also in "easily be torn apart," you may want to omit "be."

"aimless with no reason or rhyme" is beautiful.

[Anita Singh]

Thank you for catching hold of the mistakes. I have made the corrections. Thanks again for reading my work, Blue! :)

[New Writer Girl]

Short,simple yet meaningful...Words do fade with time but the magic which you are creating with yours won't fade away so easily....
The poem holds our interest from starting to end and doesn't disappoints at all....

[Mary Bradley]

Very remarkable poem Anita Singh . Striking the truth in this modern era , lies and empty promises everywhere we turn !

[Gee]

Jeez,I've made some of them over the years.Nice read

[Anita Singh]

Thank you!!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

wow beautifully crafted and very well expressed nice to read this!

[Anita Singh]

Thank you!!

[Johanna]

Oh I love this!! I like your style a lot! this poemstyle is one of my favorites, love the rhyme and flow and all the words, the whole poem was beautiful

[Anita Singh]

Thanks, Johanna!

[Eve Ola]

beautiful read i love your writing style.

[Anita Singh]

Thanks, Eve!

[Avinash]

Tell us the name...we will take care.. just kidding :)
Its a beautiful poem.

[Anita Singh]

Haha, Avi! You are the man! thanks :)

[Matching Socks]

Love the concept of the flimsy promises. :)
Enjoyed this poem.

[Anita Singh]

Thank you so much, Ance!

[Lizzie]

Hey! I like the use of paper to describe the fragility of the relationships. I really liked your poem, Annabella. :)

[Shaquana Adams]

Words that fade away with time
Your promises left me aimless with no reason or rhyme.

This is a very powerful poem. Very nice work Anita! ^-^
-QuanaWana